Aburame Update

[The Dude]

Kikaichuu Maikurou Ibu (Kikaichuu Micro-Weave)
RANK: A
TYPE: Passive Ninjutsu
RANGE: Self
HANDSEALS: None
CHAKRA: Mid Upkeep +1 tier per every jutsu used in association with Kikaichuu Maikurou Ibu.
SPECIAL:
DESCRIPTION: Kikaichuu are small but they are many, and working together they can accomplish many things. With training in flawless communication and synchronizing the swarm with their own body, a truly amazing Aburame can coat the entire length in of his body in a micro-weave composed of the Kikaichuu. The living armor of bugs take on the likeness and attributes of the Aburame making them undetectable as a thin shell covering the body with the outward appearance of the Aburame himself. The coat moves flexibly and weightlessly as it perfectly contours to the host's body.
DOMAIN: Aburame


Maikurou Ibu Chakura
RANK: B
TYPE: Ninjutsu Supplementary
RANGE: Self
HANDSEALS: None
CHAKRA: -------
SPECIAL: On touch contact with the user the Aburame drains chakra at rate of highest rank of Mushi Chakura no Jutsu known.
DESCRIPTION: Once the user has learned to coat their body in Kikaichuu they can channel absorption properties through their armor. Draining chakra from any victim that remains in contact with them.
DOMAIN: Aburame, Kikaichuu Maikurou Ibu


Maikurou Ibu Kami sori
RANK: D, C, B, A, S
TYPE: Ninjutsu supplementary
RANGE: Self
HANDSEALS: None
CHAKRA: Very Low - Very High
SPECIAL: Shaves and shreds matter on contact, damage based upon highest rank known.

DESCRIPTION: Just like in the Razor Kikaichuu technique, the user can evolve the kikaichuu of their armor to to take on more damaging qualities at the cost of their absorption abilities. Upon striking an enemy with a taijutsu strike the kikaichuu armor will eat away at whatever external source they contact shaving matter away.
DOMAIN: Aburame, Kikaichuu Maikurou Ibu


Furī Seikei Maikurou Ibu
RANK: A
TYPE: Supplementary Ninjutsu
RANGE: Touch
HANDSEALS: None
CHAKRA: Very High
SPECIAL: Speed at which the armor grows and forms depends on highest rank of Kikaichuu no Jutsu.
DESCRIPTION: The final stage of the micro weave armor manipulation is the free forming technique. The user can manipulate the armor coating and feed more kikaichuu to cause the armor to form into desired shapes and extend into thicker armor, blades for hands, barbs that protrude out further from the armor. Anything the armor forms into shape wise is limited only by the user's experience and imagination. However the free forming must originate from the host and his micro weave armor, it cannot be used to manipulate the swarm of kikaichuu when not in contact with the Aburame. It should be noted that because the armor is living and because aburame techniques do not require handseals MEANING that an Aburame can manipulate the armor in a constant flowing and free forming style (hence free forming technique derkader) that this technique is supposed to allow the user to augment it's shape on the go. Examples of it's use will now be given to avoid confusion.

Enemy shunsuis behind the Aburame warriors back. Potential use? Causing a spike that grows forth from the back of the warrior in an attempt to try to stab back at the opponent during a moment they would least expect it.

Enemy disarms aburame. Potential use? Aburame manipulates the coat along the arm from the elbow down extending and materializing into a buzzing angry blade composed of kikaichuu. Because of the kikaichuu properties (think nano bots or something) the blade won't cut, but rather shave as the blade is composed of Razor kikaich (stingers, pinchers, and razor edged wings)

Aburame makes an attempt to grab someone but they sidestep his grasp. An additional arm composed of kikaichuu can sprout and grow forth from the coat sideways to still grab hold of him.
DOMAIN: Aburame, Kikaichuu Maikurou Ibu

[~Kohana <3]

Kikaichuu Maikurou Ibu- Fix the special to clarify what exactly you mean. And if you meant reduces damage taken by one rank, I think there should still be some kind of chakra expenditure. Perhaps not an initial, but say an X amount used when hit in order to lessen the damage.

Maikurou Ibu Chakrura- I think this is fine

Maikurou Ibu Kami Sori- Change chakra to VL-M Also come up with how much is shredded per rank.

Furi Seikei Maikurou Ibu- Change chakra to Very High.

[The Dude]

bump

[suzaku]

I'd like to see this armor have an upkeep cost per turn, not just per attack absorbed, and I'd like to see this upkeep go up by one tier when the armor begins to be used in one of the offensive jutsu listed below.

Your shredding ability should have a cost of Very Low - Very High.

[The Dude]

bump

[suzaku]

Increase the upkeep to mid for your armor, and add to the special that it can only reduce the damage of A rank and lower attacks by one rank.

[The Dude]

bump

[vegapunk]

*Close the paragraph break in the first technique's description, its not needed and messy.

* Kikaichuu Maikurou Ibu: Not sure I like the special on this technique. I would recommend editing the technique so that instead of reduced damage by one, it 'stacks' the defensive, allowing a covering defense equal to one's "Kikaichuu no Jutsu" base rank (forming a more layer style defense than a pure reduction). Retrains should be added in order to determine the duration of that the bugs can form this armor around your body. Note, you will need to add Kikaichuu no Jutsu into the domain also.

* Maikurou Ibu Chakura: Contact will need to be determined. Is this purely physical contact or does it also include ninjutsu based traps on a the user etc?

* Maikurou Ibu Kami sori: The mps (meters per second) on this technique is messy and I don't really understand its purpose? why is it there?

* Furī Seikei Maikurou Ibu: I think this should be multi-ranked, with a % of how much of the armor (your body) can be covered by whatever you wish at a single time e.g D 15%, C 30% etc. In a manner much like that of the Shikigami. Would need an upkeep chakra cost associated with it.

-- Although not major, I would employ you to add the english name to these technique's also.

[The Dude]

As of now Ignore this thread, I'm rewriting it to make it easier to understand. When I'm done I'll request someone to come look at it again. Hopefully once I've redone it there will be little to change but if there is would you all kindly look at each other's posts and stop talking in circles. You do these things, and then I change exactly what you ask for only to backtrack and change it again depending on each of your own opinions and views on it. I understand the blame falls partially on me, but whether I'm staff or not I'm going to point the finger back at yourselves. Vega told me to reword it as I saw other jutsu, I thought I initially did that but as the editting progressed I believe you each brought a different perspective from techniques that were not really all that related.

EG- I think Kohana used his experience with medical jutsu because when he asked for how much my bugs could shred it sounded very similar to the Dead Hands Medical Tech the destroys cells at a speed of 1 inch per second per rank. I'm not picking on Kohana but from what I know of him, he can take a little criticism without getting bent out of shape. He bounces back like that. However there are several examples of what I find to be misinterpretations of my techniques where you referenced other techniques from the site. I understand why you do this, it helps you reference techniques to others already existing so you can compare how they will function as well as the balance that must be exhibited on a site of this caliber. It makes sense and I commend you for doing it, as I said before the fault is most likely mine. However when I do have this up again, I would appreciate it if you all did a few things for me while doing it.

First off please have a tab open to the Aburame Clan. Most of the techniques and manipulation of the kikaichuu I'm going off of are from there, that's why I referenced a lot of the already existing techniques when I first wrote this (No wai right?!?!) I believe having this page open will help us stay on the same page as far as what I'm attempting to convey in my personal opinion.

Second, I would appreciate it if you would communicate among each other and read each other's comments. As I'm sure some of you heard me snapping about this cause I was getting angry (I apologize), but when I change something and then have to change it back because of a conflict of opinions among those who check this over it helps if you're all on the same page. That being said, if you see something you think is wrong that another staff member may have mentioned, before you go ahead and simply tell me to change it to what you think is best talk it out with that staff member and discuss it. Even if they're not online you can send them a polite little pm and I'll gladly wait for you all to come to a consensus together rather than have me change the sames rules around three times.

Thirdly, keep doing what you're doing. All of you raised fine points of consideration that really did need to be changed from the original. You guys are great at what you do honestly and truly. As I said before, I think it was mostly myself who dropped the ball on this one with the way I worded things. I don't want you to take offense to this because I sincerely don't mean any. The only failing here was a failure of communication. I will endeavor to fix this post haste.

-TG out-