Explosion. [selfish]

[luneth]

Hakke, Shō Bakuha (Eight Divination Signs, Palm Explosion)
RANK: C
TYPE: Offensive / Jūken Nintaijutsu
RANGE: Self
HANDSEALS: No
STAMINA/CHAKRA: Mid
SPECIAL: Injects a burst of chakra into the opponent via palm strike, shutting off the chakra points his palm covers, while damaging all nearby internal organs. Causes 'C' ranked internal damage upon contact, and an additional 'C' ranked damage from the internal bleeding effect for the next two turns, though stopping early if healed by a medical jutsu.
DESCRIPTION: A Hyūga technique developed by Haru which overcharges a single Jūken strike. When attacking with his palm in an attempt to damage the foe internally, he will suddenly inject additional chakra into the victim, creating a small 'explosion' inside their body, damaging internal organs within the vicinity, while shutting off the chakra points his palm covers.
DOMAIN: Haru Hyūga Only. Byakugan.

[vegapunk]

Great! Looks good and deadly.

1/3

[adero]

Wasn't the point of Hyuuga to have pin point precision striking at chakra points?

Not blindly hitting an area and getting lucky from brute force >>

[luneth]

I know that, but the air palm technique can shut off multiple tenketsu at once, so...

EDIT: In addition to the large burst of chakra, he would send chakra from certain tenketsu within his palm so that they matched up with the opponents; the tenketsu are as small as the tip of a needle, so thats how small he could make the chakra exerted from them be. This additional, narrower form of chakra would leave his palms tenketsu and be transfered into the opponents tenketsu, shutting them off. Not sure if that would work, but I don't think it'd need to be added to the description if it does, because I already put it shuts off the tenketsu.

[adero]

I can't allow this custom.

The damage is far too great. First off, anything dealing with "internal organ damage" is very fickle. Internal organ damage under any circumstance (except something shitty like the gall bladder) is almost always going to be potentially lethal - let alone A rank damage directly to an organ.

Secondly, this does A rank damage + B for EVERY turn thereafter... meaning I take one hit and I eventually die regardless. On top of that, retraining stacks both the instant damage and the damage over time - that too is completely unacceptable since it not only does infinite damage over time but double dips into the inc in damage.

...Not to mention the effects of a chakra booster on this. Suddenly you're doing S rank + A rank every turn for only very high chakra. Again - not acceptable.

This whole concept is just out of whack.

Denied 1/2

[luneth]

ok, modified.

[adero]

"he will suddenly inject an excessive, rapid torrent of chakra into the victim, creating a wide, destructive 'explosion' inside their body"

Don't like the wording. Too lethal, esp for a B rank. You kinda fixed the damage (still an issue w/ how chakra booster would apply to this so I still don't find it acceptable) but the way its worded now isn't doable.

[luneth]

sorry about that, fixed.

[adero]

Still think this threads too much under medics and Akadou and not Hyuuga. Damage modifiers from chakra booster would still be too big of an issue. Triple C rank damage for 1 C rank also makes me weary, let alone triple B rank for 1 C rank of chakra w/ 1 booster.

Still no.

[luneth]

Meh, you can go ahead and delete/archive the thread or w/e. Thanks for the quick replies, atleast.