Inferno Swallow

[X-Ray]

Jigoku no Hien (Inferno Swallow)
Rank: A
Type: Offensive/Ninjutsu
Range: See Special
Handseals: Yes
Chakra: Very High
Special: Adds fire damage by the weapon's rank. can be retrained up to twice stacking fire damage each time. Second retraining increase consumption by one.
Description: Through continued use of the flying swallow and having a natural chakra nature of the Fire Release they become able to focus their fiery chakra along the blade creating a deep red color and coating the blade in a heated chakra. This coating created by the chakra increases the heat able to burn anything within a meters reach of the blade.
Domain: Hien (Flying Swallow), Fire Release, Fire Dominion "A-rank"

[KID GAMBINO.]

Add Stamina to the consumption since this is Nintaijutsu and handseal-less, or change it to simple Ninjutsu that requires Handseals and only drains Chakra.

Add [initial + upkeep] next to consumption cost, I can't see this sustaining without a constant source of energy.

State that the distance and speed of flames is the same as "Enkou Shika".

Also, I'm assuming you mean to have this be capable of shooting waves of flames for each training, but it's hard to understand with the last sentence. Please reword it so people reading understand that with each training, the user can shoot one wave of flames from the sword. In addition, based on the custom guide, for each second retraining the consumption will increase by one.

Expand a little more on how the sword is surrounded by heat chakra, but shoot flames... it's better off saying that the blade is just coated in fire, then it would make more sense that what it shoots is flames.

[Exar Kun]

I agree with Laz for the most part.

However, not all techniques become nintaijutsu due to not requiring handseals; the war-fan techniques for example are pure ninjutsu, despite needing handseals. Nintaijutsu is usually used for techniques that require physical effort plus chakra enhancement. Making your sword catch on fire would not, in itself, require stamina.

You can change it to Nintaijutsu if you want, which would require a stamina cost and upkeep as well. Alternatively, you can keep it a pure ninjutsu technique, but you would have to state in the technique's effect that while the technique does not use handseals, the user is required to "charge" the technique for the same duration as one would form A-Rank handseals.

Check out the first technique in the war-fan style if you'd like an example of what I'm talking about.

[Forsaken]

kk fixed it

[Not Masakuni]

I'd say chose between stacking damage or increasing the number of waves, not both, for something of this strength.

[X-Ray]

I changed it to where you can choose which way you stack it but you can still only train it twice either way. better or just make it S?

[Not Masakuni]

Second retraining ups the chakra consumption, and then it should be good. ^^

[adero]

can be retrained up to twice increasing the amount of waves by one or stacking fire damage each time.

Pick one or the other.

[X-Ray]

kk fixed it

[adero]

can be retrained up to twice increasing the amount of waves by one or stacking fire damage each time.

Again. One or the other.

Very basic English.

can be retrained up to twice increasing the amount of waves by one or stacking fire damage each time.

OR

an be retrained up to twice increasing the amount of waves by one or stacking fire damage each time.

[X-Ray]

fixed

[adero]

Why are there on hand seals? - they said make it nin/tai or add seals.

[Forsaken]

May 18, 2012 11:33:56 GMT -8 Exar Kun said:

You can change it to Nintaijutsu if you want, which would require a stamina cost and upkeep as well. Alternatively, you can keep it a pure ninjutsu technique, but you would have to state in the technique's effect that while the technique does not use handseals, the user is required to "charge" the technique for the same duration as one would form A-Rank handseals.

thats why

[adero]

Don't like it - too subjective. Add hand seals.

[X-Ray]

fixed it