Sansutsomu vol. 2

[Leonov]

Unryō [Cloud Cover]
Rank: C
Type: Supplementary / Clan Kekkei Touta / Ranton Ninjutsu
Range: See special!
Handseals: Yes.
Chakra: Mid
Special: Max size depends on the user's highest 'Storm Channeling' rank. The cloud may be completely manipulated by the clan member after summon. When activated, the cloud will last a single turn. Each retraining will increase that count by one additional turn. Individuals may only see up to one meter ahead of them when inside the cloud. Will be pierced by Doujutsu. Fuuton techniques of a higher rank will disperse the mist.
Description: Forming the necessary hand seals and utilizing their unique Kekkai Genkai the user summons a thundercloud capable of being manipulated by their Doujutsu when active. The thunderclouds will boom with dulled thunder and flash with harmless lightning, further emphasizing the stormy nature of the cloud.
Domain: Sansutsomu. Advanced Storm Channeling 'C'.

Sutōmuboruto [Storm Bolt]
Rank: B
Type: Offensive / Clan Kekkei Touta / Ranton Ninjutsu
Range: See special!
Handseals: Yes.
Chakra: High
Special: Max strength and range of the bolt depends on the user's highest 'Storm Channeling' rank. One bolt may be thrown after the handseals are done. Each retraining will increase the bolts able to be thrown after activation by one. If a storm cloud is present within the user's 'Storm Channeling' range, handseals and chakra cost decrease by one tier. Size of the explosion is equal to 1/10th the max range of 'Storm Channeling'.
Description: Forming the necessary hand seals and utilizing their unique Kekkai Genkai the user summons a very brief thundercloud over them, and from that thundercloud they may pull out a bolt of storm energy. The bolt is lightning inside a layer of condensed water, and when thrown, powerful winds speed the bolt up to max speeds. If a storm cloud is already present, half the jutsu is already done, so less chakra and time is spent to do the jutsu. The bolts will travel in a straight line when thrown. Upon impact with an object, the bolts will explode, damaging all caught nearby, shocking them as well.
Domain: Sansutsomu. Advanced Storm Channeling 'C'.

Kami no Sensha [Storm God's Chariot]
Rank: A
Type: Offensive / Clan Kekkei Touta / Ranton Ninjutsu
Range: See special!
Handseals: Yes.
Chakra: High x2
Special: If the user maintains a hold on the reigns, the chariot may travel indefinite distances. If the chariot is being controlled from a distance, maximum range depends on the user's highest 'Storm Channeling' rank, as is the strength and durability of the chariot. An upkeep of one High per turn is required to keep it active. From a distance, its path is controlled by the clan member's Doujutsu. Upon impact, an explosion is created equal to 1/5th the user's highest 'Storm Channeling' rank. Those caught in the explosion, if not dead, are paralyzed for one turn. The user may be injured if caught in the blast.
Description: Forming the necessary hand seals and utilizing their unique Kekkai Genkai the user summons a chariot composed of condensed lightning, led by horses created out of electrified, compacted water, while strong winds power the chariot's movement on the ground or on the air. The user may hold onto reigns on the chariot and ride it like one would a normal mobile transport. Upon remote detonation by the user or a collision with something hard enough, the whole ability will explode, damaging and shocking all those caught within range of the explosion. Allies may hold onto the reigns with little fear of being hurt.
Domain: Sansutsomu. Advanced Storm Channeling 'A'.

Raitoningurōpu [Lightning Rope]
Rank: C
Type: Offensive / Clan Kekkei Touta / Ranton Ninjutsu
Range: See special!
Handseals: No.
Chakra: Mid
Special: Max range and durability depends on the user's highest 'Storm Channeling' rank. May only be activated while Raitoninguchariotto is summoned. Only one person may be roped at one time. With each retraining, an additional person may be roped simultaneously within range. If multiple targets are caught, the ropes will slam the targets against each other before reeling them in. May target humans and other objects.
Description: With Raitoninguchariotto active, instead of summoning reigns for the user to hold on, ropes of lightning may shoot out from the chariot and grab any targets within its vicinity. The ropes will deal absolutely no damage. Instead, upon contact with the target, if human, will separate into three thinner ropes at the end, two pulling each of the target's hands away from each other, and the third tying the target's arms to his sides. After capture, the ropes slam the targets to each other, before pulling them onto the chariot.
Domain: Sansutsomu. Raitoninguchariotto.

[addy-hime ♥]

Cloud Cover

• It states that it lasts a turn after the turn it was summoned, which is actually two turns total. This needs to be changed to one turn at first and more with retraining. Dem's da rules.

Storm Bolt

• I'd prefer if this was 'B' rank with 'High' cost, to be honest with you. Potential 'S' rank damage for potentially 'D' handseals + Low chakra? No thanks. Bump it up a bit, or make it so that the damage is equal to this specific technique.

Storm God's Chariot

• This requires an upkeep time. I think 'High' for upkeep makes sense in this case.
  
• Just mention briefly that if the user is caught in the explosion they will be injured too.

Lightning Rope

• Instead of retraining to use more ropes, I would prefer if the rope could initially just catch one person. Then, with each retraining it's capable of catching one more person.

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[Leonov]

I think I got it. Tell me if you need anything else done.

[KEITH]

Kami no Sensha [Storm God's Chariot]
Rank: B
Type: Offensive / Clan Kekkei Touta / Ranton Ninjutsu
Range: See special!
Handseals: Yes.
Chakra: High
Special: If the user maintains a hold on the reigns, the chariot may travel indefinite distances. If the chariot is being controlled from a distance, maximum range depends on the user's highest 'Storm Channeling' rank, as is the strength and durability of the chariot. An upkeep of one High per turn is required to keep it active. From a distance, its path is controlled by the clan member's Doujutsu. Upon impact, an explosion is created equal to 1/5th the user's highest 'Storm Channeling' rank. Those caught in the explosion, if not dead, are paralyzed for one turn. The user may be injured if caught in the blast.
Description: Forming the necessary hand seals and utilizing their unique Kekkai Genkai the user summons a chariot composed of condensed lightning, led by horses created out of electrified, compacted water, while strong winds power the chariot's movement on the ground or on the air. The user may hold onto reigns on the chariot and ride it like one would a normal mobile transport. Upon remote detonation by the user or a collision with something hard enough, the whole ability will explode, damaging and shocking all those caught within range of the explosion. Allies may hold onto the reigns with little fear of being hurt.
Domain: Sansutsomu. Advanced Storm Channeling 'B'.

Not too sure about that underlined portion. The range of your dominion should be it's maximum range, unless you have a technique or a master which extends your range. Also, bump this technique up to S-rank technique, and make the proper chakra consumption adjustments with the rank boost.

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[addy-hime ♥]

Circa, the point of the underlined portion is saying that you have to literally be holding the reigns of the chariot, thus inside of it. Chances are if you're inside of it you'll be moving with it, moving your domain range around as well. Which is why that part is perfectly fine.

I also disagree slightly with your rank comment. I do believe 'B' rank is too low for it, now that I read it again. But I think bumping it up to 'A' rank with High x2 chakra consumption would be suitable. However, you'll need to also add in a chakra upkeep.. I'm thinking High.

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[Leonov]

Done. Thank you, Addy.

[addy-hime ♥]

1/3.

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[KEITH]

2/3

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[Exar Kun]

3/3