a few raiton jutsu

[luneth]

Hekireku (Thunder Clap)
Rank: D
Type: Offensive
Range: See Special!
Handseals: Yes
Chakra: Low x2
Special: Creates a thunderous boom or clap from above, capable of being casted from anywhere within the user's 'Karai Shin' range. This does not guarantee the opponent will react. Noise can last for a maximum of one second, plus one more each time retrained; however, after every fifth retraining, the consumption will go up by one.
Description: Following a short amount of handseals, the user will generate an extremely loud clap of thunder overhead, with its purpose being to surprise or even intimidate an opponent (jumping at the sound, looking behind/up, etc.). Alternatively, it can be used to mask the noise of something, or even a person's movement, useful for distraction.
Domain: Raiton. Karai Shin 'D'.

Denryū Daichi (Earthen Current)
Rank: C
Type: Offensive
Range: See Special!
Handseals: Yes
Chakra: Mid [initial + upkeep]
Special: Creates thin, small channels of raiton chakra from the user's fingertips, each travelling in unison along the earth, their sole direction capable of being controlled by the user as long as he/she remains in place, and continues to expend chakra. Deals C-ranked shocking damage upon reaching its victim, while simultaneously leaving them stuck in place for 1/4th of a turn. The current will immediately be dispelled if struck by a jutsu of equal or higher rank. Both speed and range are equivalent to the user's highest 'Karai Shin' rank. Each time retrained, additonal C-ranked shocking damage is stacked; however, after every fourth retraining, the consumption will go up by one. Can be trained a maximum of 8 times.
Description: Forming the necessary handseals, the user will then emit a current of chakra from their fingertips and into the ground, these tendrils of raiton chakra all moving together along the earth, capable of being controlled by the user as long as they remain still and continue to emit the current from their hands and into the ground. While easily visible, the current's speed and nimbleness can make it hard to dodge nonetheless. Upon reaching an opponent, the raiton chakra will travel through their entire body, leaving them stuck in place momentarily as it deals a reasonable amount of shocking damage.
Domain: Raiton. Karai Shin 'C'.

Raijin Dokusei (Thunder God's Virulence)
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: See Special!
Handseals: Yes
Chakra: High [initial + upkeep]
Special: Allows the Raiton wielder to emit a beam of lightning from their mouth, its diameter measuring 1/4th of the user's maximum 'Karai Shin' range. Alternatively, the user can seperate the beam in two, both parts dealing B-ranked damage, opposed to the single beam's A-ranked damage. Range and speed of the beams are equal to the user's maximum 'Karai Shin' rank. Can be retrained once, stacking an additional A/Bx2 ranked damage.
Description: Following a relatively large amount of handseals, the user will conjure an incessant, devastating beam of lightning from their mouth, with the capability of maintaining this lethal discharge for as long as their chakra can sustain it. This jutsu comes in two forms, one being the focusing of the chakra into a single, laser-like emission of lightning, and the other being the seperation of the one beam into two weaker, albeit still destructive, counterparts, both capable of being shot in their own separate directions. At its strongest, the ninjutsu is capable of ripping though and completely obliterating boulders, trees, solid earth, entire buildings, and even certain metals.
Domain: Raiton. Karai Shin 'A'.

[Exar Kun]

- I'd like to see what other staff think about the first technique before I make any judgement. Creating loud noises seems more like Ototon's field than raiton.

- To start off with the second technique, attack strength can not be retrained to do more damage than S-Rank, so you would only be able to retrain the ability a maximum of one time, for S/A damage.

Secondly, I don't really see how this technique is unique enough to even really be a custom, much less a custom. We already have two techniques, Shooting Thunder and Chain Lightning, that fulfill the function of shooting blasts of lightning out of your hands to stun and shock people.

[Exar Kun]

Whoops. I'm sorry, I was referring to the third technique, not second. xD Fortunately you seem to have noticed that though.

For Earthen Current, state in the effect that the damage can only be stacked via retraining up to S-Rank.

Aside from that... eh, everything else looks fine, I suppose.

Make that change and you get my 1/3

[luneth]

Done ^^.

EDIT: went back and fixed a grammar mistake after your 1/3, that's all.

[Exar Kun]

1/3

[addy-hime ♥]

My main issue is with the selfish technique. You say it's not very unique and that is very much true; though it may fit the theme of your character, it's not unique enough for me to accept as a selfish. You can either make it more unique (in which case you'll need to post it in a new thread, with 'selfish' in the title) or you can make it universal.

Also, in your second tech, can you please remove the last sentence in the special and replace it with: "Can be trained a maximum of 8 times." That's 'S' rank damage for a 'C' rank retrainable. c:

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[luneth]

Alright, it's universal now, and fixed the second jutsu.

[Exar Kun]

1/3

[KEITH]

2/3.

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[vegapunk]

3/3