Arm of the cursed one

[mirci]

Arm of the Cursed One
RANK:D,C,B,A,S
TYPE:Supplementary/Nintaijutsu
RANGE:Self
HANDSEALS:N/A
STAMINA/CHAKRA: D - Low, C - Mid, B - High, A - High x2, S - High x3
SPECIAL: Coats a single arm in chakra that protects it and increases the damage of attacks made with the arm. Damage and defense are equal to one rank lower than the highest known rank in this technique.
DESCRIPTION: By concentrating his Chakra into his arm the user is able to shape a strong chakra coat along his arm.The chakra's color is white and becomes so strong the actual arm is hidden under the white tick chakra coat.It takes the exact form of the arm but bigger and at the end of the arm,by the shoulders, the chakra bursts out like flames.Depending on how strong the chakra flames burst the hit becomes more powerfull. In order to use this technique an user must be cursed by a special curse.(Like my character's right arm).The curse doesn't allow the user to mold chakra for other techniques after using this one therefore the user is unable to use any techniques in the following 3 posts.
DOMAIN: Nintaijutsu

[KEITH]

TECHNIQUE NAMEArm of the Cursed One
RANK:D,C,B,A,S
TYPE:Supplementary/Ninjutsu
RANGE:Self
HANDSEALS:N/A
STAMINA/CHAKRA: Low (and it grows by rank.... maximum is High)
SPECIAL: Basically this technique gives more strength in the hits made with that arm and it offers protection to the arm from incoming attacks
DESCRIPTION: By concentrating his Chakra into his arm the user is able to shape a strong chakra coat along his arm.The chakra's color is white and becomes so strong the actual arm is hidden under the white tick chakra coat.It takes the exact form of the arm but bigger and at the end of the arm,by the shoulders, the chakra bursts out like flames.Depending on how strong the chakra flames burst the hit becomes more powerfull. In order to use this technique an user must be cursed by a special curse.(Like my character's right arm).
DOMAIN: Ninjutsu

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I'm sure that this technique would be considered a Nintaijutsu, and with it being a "cursed" arm, I guess it would be so because of Juuinjutsu. Since one's who have been "cursed" in the Naruto series is because of Juuinjutsu. And with that said, what is your curse, anyway?

Now, to get on to the techniques basis, so your arm gets stronger every time you hit something? And, it offers protection against oncoming attacks? It does this automatically, or do you give up more chakra for this ability? Also, that doesn't seem much like a curse..since I don't see any drawbacks a curse would have for using it's power. You need to make some changes to this, overall.

An example of making this work could be that you make it a single rank, and every retrain, you can make the damage stack, perhaps. Also, for that protection thing, you will probably have to give up some additional chakra, and even then, the arm can only take equal rank damage before you are able to use that protection again. And, maybe as a drawback, you should just make it so you can't use this ability at all for a few turns. Then to use it again, you have to give up double the normal consumption rate, after like, two or three turns. That's kind of like a curse.

But, let's see what my peers think.

[mirci]

No it doesn't get stronger with every hit.. the strength bonus remains the same as long as the technique is active.And the technique only protects the arm from upcoming attacks... well you could use it to block thrown shuriken or smth but it would be hard since the tech only increases the arm's size by little

[Not Masakuni]

Hm. Alright.

[1.] First off, because your character's cursed arm isn't an actual custom and exists purely for Roleplay flavour, it shouldn't be a requirement for this technique. If you want that individual flare, simply make this a personal technique.

[2.] Replace the text "Technique Name" with the name of the technique, instead of putting it next to it.

[3.] This should either be Nintaijutsu or require seals. Sealless ninjutsu are very, very unique cases, and this isn't one of those cases.

[4.] Stamina/Chakra should be Low-Massive, not maxed out at High.

[5.] This cannot both block high-level attacks and deliver high-level attacks. Something has to give in each case. Choose either to make this defensive or offensive. Like sealless ninjutsu, being able to improve attack and defense simultaneously is a potent advantage, and universal ninjutsu just doesn't cut it for that.

[Sharkk]

Or just make it SS to compensate for Defense + Offense?

[Exar Kun]

In addition to Masa's points, could you clean up the technique a bit? To start with, for the chakra/stamina section, just put "Very Low-High". Moving on from there:

SPECIAL: Basically this technique gives more strength in the hits made with that arm and it offers protection to the arm from incoming attacks

Re-write this as something akin to: "Coats a single arm in chakra that protects it and increases the damage of attacks made with the arm. Damage and defense increase is decided by rank of technique used."

Regarding the description:

By concentrating his Chakra into his arm the user is able to shape a strong chakra coat along his arm.The chakra's color is white and becomes so strong the actual arm is hidden under the white tick chakra coat.It takes the exact form of the arm but bigger and at the end of the arm,by the shoulders, the chakra bursts out like flames.Depending on how strong the chakra flames burst the hit becomes more powerfull. In order to use this technique an user must be cursed by a special curse.(Like my character's right arm).The curse doesn't allow the user to mold chakra for other techniques after using this one therefore the user is unable to use any techniques in the following 3 posts..

Well, please run this through Microsoft Word or some other text editor that has a spell and grammar check. There are a couple typos and a lot of punctuation errors (for example, "tick" when you meant to say "thick").

And as Masa said, please remove the part about the "cursed arm".

[Not Masakuni]

May 31, 2012 19:35:37 GMT -8 Sharkk said:

Or just make it SS to compensate for Defense + Offense?

SS-level things have always been incredibly rare and valuable. We set Relics and Kinjutsu at that level, the only other exception being the Celestial Gates. Unless this is going to be a Kinjutsu, with all that entails, I won't be accepting a random SS technique, certainly not a personal one. That sort of thing needs a very good reason.

[Sharkk]

Making it pretty hard for someone to make themselves stand out/customize themselves.

[Not Masakuni]

Jun 1, 2012 19:33:31 GMT -8 Sharkk said:

Making it pretty hard for someone to make themselves stand out/customize themselves.

If you have in issue with conduct or regulations in this board, take it elsewhere, please. Perhaps make a thread in the staff board, if you feel strongly. Lets not fill up a member's custom thread with an unrelated discussion.

[mirci]

i made most of the changes... if you see something wrong please point it out

[Not Masakuni]

Getting closer, very good. Just two things; increase the consumption to 'Very Low - Very High', and then change 'Damage and defense increase is decided by rank of technique used' to 'damage and defense are equal to one rank lower than the highest known rank in this technique.'

Then it would be acceptable.

[mirci]

Done and good to go

[Not Masakuni]

Let's try this out. We're gonna count this one as a personal technique, guys.

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[Exar Kun]

2/3

[KEITH]

3/3