We're Just Two Butterflies, Trying[Aiko][Finished]

[kasuke]

Change.

Everything changed and everyone changed. No matter how hard you try. Events in life shaped the world as you knew it, they shaped movements, but most of all, they shaped you as a whole.

Before this life, everything was fantabulous. You wouldn't be scared about to walk to a new place, you'd have that neighbour to lend you a cup of sugar to finish a cake for that party you forgot about. Life was not so scary, until arguements came. Nobody is perfect.

But of course, there was one thing that would not change in life. Something deep down inside that you created when you were just an infant. Will. Yes. Your will to do things. Your will to love, to fight and to be yourself.

One boy had it all. One boy knew what it was life to have a heart. His heart controlled every action he made, that's what made him who he was.

Angelic boy of Konoha had sat their to enjoy a small snack. A quick bowl of Ramen before going about on his day. He had planned to enhance his medical abilities, but he could not on an empty stomach.

The boy had style, his hair made to perfection, each strand knew its place ontop of his head. He also wore his rainbow bracelets which chimed sweet music when the wind lightly touched them together.

"Thank you." He said in appreciation as he began to eat. Although times were hard, it would seem this shop would do its best to serve customers.

The hot bowl of Ramen reminded him of the fond memories of having a family, and running outside to play. All Kasuke had to worry about when he was a kid was if he was going to get dessert at the end of supper.

Now all of it was gone. It was only memories, and he was a Ninja because? His parents. It was expected.

These memories could never be renewed. It was Kasuke's choice to either bank them or forget them...

[Aiko Yukina]

Six months it had been since the departure, six months since Aiko had seen her aunt. She had chosen to stay behind, leaving her with those foul beasts in the mist. As she wandered the streets of the Hidden Leaf Village, the poor girl couldn’t help but wonder if perhaps she had made a bad decision. Was it possible that fleeing the Village of the Mist had been a bad idea? With tensions running so high between the countries, was it possible that the new kage would send troops to bring back even the most miniscule of shinobi? If they did find her what would they do with her? Would she be killed?

With an agitated sigh, the woman tossed her bag onto the ground and shook her head. What did it matter? She had come this far on her journey. She had sailed the ocean and arrived in Fire Country, searched the scorched land in search of a new home. Through it all, she had somehow managed to arrive undetected… Perhaps the Village wasn’t even looking for her. It seemed very possible at that point. Regardless, the Genin sat down on a bar stool in front of a ramen shop. After so many long weeks of travel, the girl was famished. She stared at the chef, receiving a stare in return as she tilted her head to the side.

Her eyes drifted from him, moving across the menu and bowls behind him. She had never been to a restaurant before, with the exception of the ramen shops that her mother had taken her to as a small child. That had been so many years ago however, that she couldn’t remember proper protocol. She wanted to eat something, anything to stop the hunger pains that were lashing at her stomach. What would she buy? More importantly how would she buy it? It wasn’t until that moment that the Genin realized she had left with very limited funds… To be more precise, she didn’t have any money. Instead, Aiko took to staring curiously at the chef and receiving agitated glances in return.

[GOAT[ ★ ]]

An anbu mysteriously appeared on sight, with orders directly from Hokage, he were to bring Aiko to the village gates

"Aiko Yukina I presume. Your fate has been decided, you will be returned to the village hidden in the Mist, rather its dead or alive might just be your choice"

He spoke in an indifferent tone, he was simply doing his job, he did not truly care for the safety of this kunoichi, she had betrayed her village after all and they didn't need shinobi's from Kirigakure pursuing her.

"You are to follow me immediately to the village gates."

He apprehended her two hands and pulled out metal handcuffs from a pouch before putting her hands behind her back and locking them. She shouldn't be able to do handseals in this condition, surely she wasn't that talented. Even if she was, he happened to be an experienced shinobi, resistantce would be futile. Of course, this would occur if she did not resist the arrest.

[Aiko Yukina]

Aiko jumped, frightened by the appearance of this new threat. He hadn't been there a moment ago certainly. From his words and serious tone, the poor girl could tell that her suspicions had been correct. She was being searched for after all. For what reasons, she wasn't certain. In those moments, the Genin's mind fired thoughts at rapid pace as she thought of all of her options. She could make ice seals with one hand certainly, forming ice with chakra that all Yukina possessed. The only problem was with the simple fact that this man was highly trained and under orders to end her life is she were to resist.

Frustrated, Aiko pulled against the chains. Her intentions were not to escape but to return to the table where the chef stood, watching curiously. "Let go of me, I'm hungry!" she shouted, trying desperately to drag herself back to the chair. "I want ramen with chicken and ham and beef! Hurry!" she cried frantically, trying to get something on her stomach. The man stared at the struggling woman, his eyes filled with both shock and amusement. "No! My Ramen!" she shouted in protest as was cuffed.

[GOAT[ ★ ]]

The mysterious male sighed and with one single strike to the nerval system, she'd likely be rendered unconscious. So pathetic, he sighed and if his strike had truly worked then he'd lift the female onto his shoulders before walking out of the scene. She likely didn't expect the strike which would only make it much more successful. The strike, so fast, wouldn't even be noticed.

"Forget what you saw!"

He'd say towards the shop owner before leaving.

[EXIT]

[kasuke]

As the boy chowed down on his meal he noticed a girl. Maybe she'd come! Was she a ninja? Certainly not of Konoha.

"He-" He was about to speak when an ANBU came and would begin to apprehend her. "Wait what?" He whispered to himself as she shouted her hunger to make it noticeable.


"Hey wait stop!" Kasuke jumped from his seat and jogged up to the ANBU.

At this point his words would try to interrupt the blow of the ANBU. "Sir, just please, at least give her 5 minutes. We're Leaf Ninja. We're not brutal. We're not savages." His soft voice spoke out a bit frustrated.

"Let me watch her for the five minutes of eating...You can watch us both too! Just please sir, allow her some food at this moment."

Yes Kasuke was begging, Kasuke was begging for the ANBU to show his heart and caring side. Surely the Leaf Ninja should not be known as brutal savages, and Kasuke would make sure of that.

"No funny business at all. I swear my allegiance to the Lord Hokage himself and to this village."

Truth. Kasuke could only speak truth. And perhaps truth would get him the 5 minutes he desired.

[kasuke]

It was too late...

She was dragged off whenever.

"Shit...."

He sighed and would finish his Ramen. "I tried...I just need to be....more vocal..."

With thus Kasuke paid the Ramen Noodle Man and would depart. He was not needed here anymore, but elsewhere.

Perhaps Aiko and Kasuke would cross paths again...he hoped so. He felt almost.....that they both were connected in someway.

Êxit/finshed]

[yokata]

Kasuke: I would suggest you write more in a paragraph format. The spacing makes it difficult to read as a whole. This, alongside improper capitalization, limits how clear and consistent your writing is. Proper nouns and proper names are capitalized. One last thing: the magical ellipsis!

The ellipsis consists of three evenly spaced dots (periods) with spaces between the ellipsis and surrounding letters or other marks. It is used to omit words and phrases from a group.

If the omission comes after the end of a sentence, the ellipsis will be placed after the period, making a total of four dots. … See how that works? Notice that there is no space between the period and the last character of the sentence.

The ellipsis can also be used to indicate a pause in the flow of a sentence and is especially useful in quoted speech:

Yokata thought and thought … and then thought some more.
"I'm wondering …" Yokata said, bemused.

Note carefully the spacing of the ellipsis marks and the surrounding characters in the examples above. In mid-sentence, a space should appear between the first and last ellipsis marks and the surrounding letters. If a quotation is meant to trail off (as in Yokata's bemused thought), leave a space between the last letter and the first ellipsis mark but do not include a period with the ellipsis marks.

20 EXP

GOAT[ ★ ]: Nice writing. 15 EXP

Aiko: The same goes for you as with Kasuke: When you improperly capitalize, it limits consistency; confusion with adverbs and prepositions too. You did a good job at making me hungry, though. 20 EXP

Summary
To Kasuke and Aiko: Flow beats length everytime.
To GOAT[ ★ : Keep up the good work!