Burn Baby!

[Forsaken]

Inferno Wall
Rank: B, A
Type: Offensive / Defensive
Range: 10 meters
Handseals: Yes
Chakra: Mid (A rank cost is High)
Special: Creates a 5 meter tall ring of flame that spreads out from the user quickly engulfing the area. When the A rank version is learned the ground will catch fire making approach hazardous for enemies.
Description: After the seals the user will build up their fire chakra around their body creating a distortion around them from the heat then release it making a tall ring of fire bellow out from their body scorching anything in its path.
Domain: Katon, Fire Dominion of equal Rank.

Blazing Pillar
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Range: 15 meters
Handseals: Yes
Chakra: High
Special: Creates a 15 meter tall 5 meter thick pillar of flame anywhere within 15 meters of the user. Retraining stacks an extra “B” rank of damage and after every 3rd retraining consumption increases by 1 rank but can't exceed an "S" Rank of damage.
Description: Once the seals are complete the user will focus and project their chakra outwards and create a rising pillar of intense flame within a certain range.
Domain: Katon, Fire Dominion “B” rank

[Exar Kun]

We already have a katon technique in the index that sets the users weapon on fire. Plus, it's fairly obvious that the first two techniques were designed to be used with your chakrams.

So you have two options: you can either remove the first two techniques altogether and just use the tech we have, or, you can add them to your chakram custom ad techs specifically for that weapon... which is what they basically are anyway.

As for the other two, they look okay to me.

[Forsaken]

fixed and I know about Inflamed Weaponry I thought those two would be different enough sry

[Exar Kun]

That's cool.

1/3

[Forsaken]

cool

[Jae]

2/3!

[Forsaken]

as far as i can tell my customs are still in line with new systems so could I get my 3/3s?

[addy-hime ♥]

Inferno Wall

• As of right now I'm not okay with stacking damage on this technique. Instead, I'd rather you make it so that the 'A' rank does more damage than the 'B' rank. You can keep the burning of the ground at 'A' rank if you want.
  
  
• Because of this, 'B' and 'A' should not cost the same amount of chakra.
  
  
• Remove the "5 mps" and add a less concrete speed in the description, such as "slowly," "quickly," etc. Make it fit with what you invision the technique doing.
  
  
• You forgot to write the Domain.

Blazing Pillar

• Since this technique is going to be stackable, you need to read the Customs guidebook about chakra consumption going up with retraining. In the special, list how many times it can be retrained before increasing in consumption. Also, make sure that you say how many times it can be retrained in general -- stacking damage can only reach 'S' rank at max.

[/justify]

[Forsaken]

inferno wall: fixed

Blazing Pillar: Do I have to put a cap? isnt the S rank consumption cap just a rule of thumb? I dont remember any other katon tech having a cap

[addy-hime ♥]

Inferno Wall

• You still did not remove the stacking from this technique.
  
  
• To get the 'A' rank of this technique, they will also need the Fire Dominion 'A' rank. I recommend writing "Fire Dominion of equal rank".

Blazing Pillar

• We're not talking about consumption, we're talking about damage. You need to make it clear that the damage can never increase above the damage an 'S' rank can do.

[/justify]

[Forsaken]

fixed

[addy-hime ♥]

Meh, I guess. 1/3.

[/justify]

[KEITH]

2/3

[Exar Kun]

3/3