Toph Vision

[KEITH]

Gen'ei no Shindo (Tremor Vision)
Rank: D, C, B, A, S
Type: Supplementary / Ninjutsu
Range: 0 - 50 Meters
Handseals: Yes [1]
Chakra: D - Low, C - Mid, B - Mid x2, A - Mid x3, S - High
Special: The level of the technique that the user can use depends on the users rank of Doton Ryuuken, and requires an equivalent upkeep of chakra depending on the level of the technique the user uses. Range is based upon the rank, like standard dominions; D-rank is 10 meters, C-rank is 20 meters, etc.
Description: Gen'ei no Shindo is a Ninjutsu technique created for those who have vision problems, but it can be also used by those who don't have any. The user of the technique begins it by forming a single handseal, and then, chakra will move through the users body and exit out of their feet and into the ground as the user stomps, causing vibrations to move throughout it. The chakra from the user will spread across the desired range that the user wishes, and once another comes into this range, the user is able to detect them by the vibrations of the sound they would make by walking upon the earth. The chakra's effect upon the earth acts of if it was an extension of the users ears. Making them able to sense those who have their chakra hidden away from the world in another way, other than sensing chakra..
Domain: Doton.

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[Gentlemanne]

I personally don't like it or want it on the site, since it's basically 24/7 chakra vision and I think it's a silly concept.

This ain't the Matrix, yo.

[addy-hime ♥]

I also dislike the concept as a whole, which is why it was removed from Doton in the first place.

1/2 denied.

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[KEITH]

Gana was referring to another jutsu I had originally, Addy. And, Gana basically gave me the idea for this one. So, if it is completely unacceptable, it can be archived. What do other mods think?

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[addy-hime ♥]

I had actually read this a bit prior to posting my comment and assumed you hadn't fixed anything, since there was no "updated" notice. That said,

[1] For rank, I would prefer if this was structured a bit like the Kuro-Shiro version of the technique. That is, being multi-rank and dependent on the domain to say which rank you can learn.

[2] As a multi-rank technique, I think this chakra consumption would be suitable: D - Low, C - Mid, B - Mid x2, A - Mid x3, S - High, with a chakra upkeep equivalent to the cost of the rank per turn.

[3] Instead of basing distance on the domain, it should be based upon the rank of this skill. D - 10 m, C - 20 m, etc. The speed however can remain based upon the domain.

[4] I'm not okay with this technique allowing you to sense chakra. Movement, yes, but not chakra - that is the domain of Kagura. To make it a bit more effective with the vibration of movement, you can include that not only does the range extend outward a certain amount of meters, but also downward? Therefore if someone was moving through the ground you would also be able to feel the vibrations of their movements. Chakra, however, no.

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[KEITH]

Done.

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[Exar Kun]

Most people should be able to get it, but all the same, I'd recommend throwing a one-liner into the effect that states that at D-Rank the technique has a range of ten meters, which increases by ten with every additional rank. Again, that's something people should be able to just figure out, but, I'm a man of making things dummy proof.

[KEITH]

Complete.

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[Exar Kun]

1/3

[addy-hime ♥]

2/3.

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[vegapunk]

3/3