Genjutsu 1.3

[kama]

Technique Name Encased Mind
Rank: B
Type: Genjutsu
Handseals: Yes
Chakra: High
Special: Walls affect those individually, meaning that walls encasing others will not be seen nor affect other targets. Effective range cannot be moved once cast and remains where the user initiated the technique. Becomes ineffective once the user or the opponent (somehow) leaves the technique's range. Can only be used once per turn, plus an additional time per retraining, each third retraining adds a High amount of chakra.
Description: The Encased Mind technique is a Genjutsu in where those affected will see how walls of a certain material (of the user's choice) will grow from the ground, forming a 5x5m square, trapping those within. Despite being illusory images, the mind percieve them as real, preventing them to pass further them. The walls goes up as long as the eye can see increasing the closer the user gets to the edge, making it impossible to escape from above. With the walls impossible to be moved, it ensures the target to be trapped inside the perimeter stated, if somehow the target leaves the area, the walls will vanish. They cannot trap a running target due to the slow growing speed. Anything interacting the walls coming from the target will look as being vanished/destroyed though it will pass through (A fire ball will be dispersed once touching the wall and a kunai would just break into countless pieces making it useless). Anything mind controlled by the target will suffer the same fate as the target, making it impossible to enter or get out of the walls.
Domain: Inton

[Naitome]

Stealth: 1/2 Denied. Unnecessary because of

Meisai Gakure no Jutsu (Camouflage Concealment Technique)
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary.
Range: -
Handseals: Yes.
Chakra: x2High to cast, Mid to sustain.
Special: Can only be spotted by chakra sensing abilites. By default, this can be used once per thread, plus one more each time retrained. No other jutsu may be used while invisible.
Description: Meisai Gakure no Jutsu is an advanced ninjutsu technique created for stealth purposes. After forming the needed handseals, the shinobi will summon a large amount of visually altering chakra, strong enough to coat their bodies and take effect within moments of being summoned. With this, the user can grant themselves near invisibility, which can be sustained even when motion or minimal contact occurs. Only chakra sensing methods have been shown to pierce the veil of chakra and see the hidden ninja.
Domain: Universal Ninjutsu.

^^Your technique is essentially a less useful version of this, with the added effect of conjuring a few leaves/fire/lightning bolts in your path, which still gives the opponent something to see and detect as odd, and visually track, fundamentally eliminating the whole 'stealth' aspect.


Encased Mind: How many times can this be used per thread? Are there retrains involved? If so, be sure to mention how the chakra cost increases after every third retraining. I'm guessing this leaves the area directly above them open? How fast are these walls forming, and are they moving with the target to attempt to 'capture' them in the event that they dodge/move out of the way? (i don't need a mps speed, btw, just some frame of reference if they do). If they can move with the target, perhaps a necessity to hold/maintain the last handseal would be appropriate. If you 'miss' the target, and the walls form in only one place, what happens if the opponent attempts to climb that wall or jump off of it or otherwise interact with it and they're not inside of it? If their mind perceives it as real when its around them, will the mind still perceive it as real if they're outside of it?

[kama]

oh, lol!!

Anyway, modified!!

[Naitome]

Small grammatical errors (such as using "faith" instead of "fate") should be cleaned up; give it a good once-over. As long as Genjutsu Kai of equal rank/A burst of Chakra similar to gates still breaks the genjutsu, and those small writing errors are fixed, I can 1/3, unless other staff disagrees. This could be quite useful in tricking an opponent into wasting chakra/making the wrong move/getting hit by a straightforward projectile that the illusion of the wall obscures.

[kama]

Done!

Also, didn't add anything about Kai and burst of chakra since as a Genjutsu it is expected to be dispelled that way, either way, I add the Kai thing to make it clear ;D

[Naitome]

Sweet. I wasn't saying you had to add that per se, just making sure that the whole "impossible to enter or get out of the walls" thing is just descriptive writing and not "My B rank Genjutsu lol's at Mangekyou Sharingan".


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[addy-hime ♥]

[1] I want you to remove the retrainability of this technique, since it just increases the duration of the Genjutsu. We have "Sonzoku no Genjutsu (Genjutsu Duration)," the prerequisite technique, to determine that.

[2] There are actually three methods of breaking out of a Genjutsu, not including doujutsu. So honestly, I don't think it's necessary to include that tidbit about Kai when there are already universal standards for it to be read in the Inton thread.

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[kama]

the retraining thing is really for times used not duration ;D

and yah... deciided to take the kai thing out

[kama]

wait!! changed something xD

[addy-hime ♥]

I know what it's for. If you really want to limit the technique that way, that's fine. I suppose it is more balanced to keep you from spamming it.

1/3.

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[Naitome]

One little bit i don't understand. "Anything mind controlled by the target will suffer the same fate as the target, making it impossible to enter or get out of the walls." What exactly are you trying to say?

[kama]

Something like bunshins.

In order to prevent things such as:

"Hey I'm trapped within the walls, but my bunshins is not so it can easily pass by the traps"

I mean, the bunshins has no mind at all, but the caster is the being affected, so if they think they cannot enter nor get outside, neither the bunshin can since it goes by the laws of the caster's mind, right?

[addy-hime ♥]

I don't see a problem with this. Like all Genjutsu, it's not actually "impossible" to get out, since there are specific ways to break an illusion. With that in mind it's fine.

1/3.

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[KEITH]

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[~Kohana <3]

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