Going For The Better Shot

[Forsaken]

Yoso no Kami (God of the Elements)[/u]
Rank: D, C, B, A, S
type: Offensive / Nintaijutsu
Range: --
Chakra: Low, Mid, Low+Mid, High, Mid+High
Special: The user can enhance their arrows with their innate release to give elemental properties to the arrow culminating in a wide blast. The initial blast size is 10 meters wide and grows in size by 5 meters with each rank. The arrow can pierce through barriers one rank lower than the rank of this technique. Must be relearned for each release.
Description: Possibly the second strongest technique within the Kamikaze arsenal, this technique creates a chakra charge of the user's own elemental chakra through the arrow. When the arrows make impact with an object it will detonate a massive blast of the element the arrow has been imbued with. The unique versatility and power of this technique lies within the power of it's user in which they can bring their prowess of their element into the shot. In this way, talented archers are capable of attacking groups of enemies, and even small armies, with the ravages of mother nature herself. The blast itself will present itself as a rapid wave of the element, shards of stone, bolts of lightning, wall of flames, concussive water, cutting wind, etc...
Domain: Archery, Way of The Kamikaze.

[Exar Kun]

Don't mind this technique too much, in fact I was thinking of putting something similar in the style.

Only thing I'm not down with is the extra damage versus elemental weaknesses. From a canon perspective it actually makes sense. But from a balancing perspective I think it's just a bit over the top, especially in addition to the 30 meter blast radius (which is huge).

So, remove the extra elemental damage and you get my 1.3.

[Forsaken]

alright Ill get a second opinion on the elemental piercing and get rid of it if they agree too thanks for the pending 1/3 ^^

[Gentlemanne]

Remove the additional piercing.

[Forsaken]

fixed and added a little to the description to clarify the actual form the blast takes

[addy-hime ♥]

[1] I'd prefer if you specified the chakra consumption for each level instead of the method you're using right now. Because honestly, it isn't descriptive; two of the ranks share the same consumption with what you have and it's left to the player to decide which one. I hate that.

[2] I'm not sure how an arrow turns into a "wall of flames." I'd feel better about it if you just said the arrows take on the property + damage of the element, maybe an aura matching the color. I dunno. Exar can help you on this one.

Otherwise, interesting technique. I like the concept.

[/justify]

[Forsaken]

1, does this cost work better?

2. Im not sure if you made it all the way through but the arrow itself doesnt become those it detonates upon impact causing a blast of the element, I guess kinda think of it as an elemental RPG lol

[addy-hime ♥]

I read all the way through the technique, Wolfy. My issue is that if it explodes into a flame wall on contact, you're doing the arrow's damage plus the damage from the fire. Not to mention a flame wall is AOE, which is awkward since you're only firing one arrow. Like I said, I'm not well-versed in the Archery style. I'd prefer Exar to comment on that particular point.

As for the chakra consumption, those don't really make sense either. Low x2 = 1 Mid. Mid x2 = 1 High. So you're basically repeating yourself several times in that list. I don't see a reason not to make 'D' Low.

[/justify]

[Forsaken]

wasn't trying to offend Ive just had times before when some people have criticize cuz they skimmed over part of it. is this consumption way better? sorry bout the issues without Im trying to get accustomed to it instead of the old way.

and okay on the mechanics with the blast I dont mind waiting on ex

[addy-hime ♥]

Hm. I'm okay with that consumption.

Just waiting on Exar's comments about your elemental properties.

[/justify]

[Forsaken]

alright, well they're all the same in concept I added that because there was a similar technique but i had doton and it didnt infer to how it would work so I put that to clear it up on mine. honestly though the thought of the fire one reminds me of Din's fire on Ocarina of Time lol

[Exar Kun]

The chakra 'splosion thing is okay. The nintaijutsu aspect of the style is all about imbuing the arrow with chakra so that it does magical stuff. So it's not really out of place.

I have some reservations about the 30 meter blast radius, which is pretty huge, but I'd rather wait and see then make an assumption now.

So, this gets my 1.3. I'll be keeping an eye on it IC'ly.

[addy-hime ♥]

Alrighty.

2/3.

[/justify]

[Messatsu!]

3/3