Iron Rebirth

[Forsaken]

Tetsu Sukeru (Iron Scales)
Rank: A
Type: Offensive / NinTaijutsu / Kekkei Genkai
Range: Self
Handseals: Yes
Chakra: High (x2 Mid Upkeep)
Special: Creates a coating of iron sand along the user's arms, legs, torso, or head as a last line of defense to protect themselves. Can be retrained to coat an extra body part (arms, legs, torso, head) each time. Once this has been retrained to cover the entire body the strength of the scales will increase to “S” rank.
Description: After the seals are completed the user will create waves of electromagnetism along their skin drawing their iron sand to it creating a second skin of armor to protect the user. However the main offset of this technique is the fact that it can only protect one part of the body at a time, because of this the user will extensively train it until they are able to coat their entire body in a nigh impenetrable skin of iron sand defense.
Domain: Zantetsuken. Satetsu Ryuuken “A” rank.

Jiga-Tetsu Rasen (Hell's Iron Spiral)
Rank: A
Type: Offensive / NinTaijutsu / Kekkei Genkai
Range: Self – 3 meters
Handseals: See Special
Chakra/stamina: High (Mid upkeep)
Special: Creates a drill around the user's arm that can sheer through any “A” rank or lower defense while maintaining it's momentum and power. Can deflect “C” rank and lower jutsu and projectiles. IF the user is currently using the Iron Scales technique they do not require handseals to perform this technique.
Description: Once the seals are complete the user will create a unique rotating magnetic field around their dominant arm. This will cause their iron sand to rotate around their arm as it forms in a massive iron drill along with spiraling ridges trailing along it to aid in penetration and damage. The rotation lets it tear straight through defenses to get at their target as well as deflect low ranking projectiles and jutsu.
Domain: Zantetsuken. Satetsu Ryuuken “A” rank.

Zantetsuken (All-Cutting Iron Blade)
Rank: B, A, S
Type: Offensive / NinTaijutsu / Kekkei Genkai
Range: Self / 6 feet
Handseals: See Special.
Chakra: Mid+Low, High, High+Mid
Special: Creates a 6 foot long iron great sword from the user's arm encasing their hand and leaving them unable to perform dual handseals. The blade can slice through anything a rank below its own rank. IF the user is currently using the Iron Scales technique they do not require handseals to perform this technique.
Description: As the user creates a polarity field around their dominant arm drawing their Iron Sand to it then expanding the field to where the iron will form a black blade extending out from their hand. The particles of iron sand along the blade edge will move and shift rapidly to make it cut with little to no effort.
Domain: Zantetsuken. Satetsu Ryuuken of equal rank.

• Zantetsuken: Reach
  Rank: A
  Type: Passive / NinTaijutsu / Kekkei Genkai
  Range: ---
  Handseals: ---
  Chakra: ---
  Special: Increases blade length by 6 inches. Can be retrained, to increase blade length by another 6 inches each time, up to 4 times.
  Description: Through specialized training the user can extend their polarity field further along their arm without compromising the structure already in place thus increasing the overall blade length.
  Domain: Zantetsuken. Satetsu Ryuuken, Zantetsuken (All-Cutting Iron Blade).
  
  
• Zantetsuken: Rip
  Rank: A
  Type: Supplementary / NinTaijutsu / Kekkei Genkai
  Range: Self
  Handseals: No
  Chakra: High [Mid Upkeep]
  Special: Enables the user to tear through constructs equal to Zantetsuken's rank and lower.
  Description: Upon gaining a mastered control over their magnetic fields the user can shift the polarity change the shape of the blade slightly creating triangular ridges along both sides of the blade length then rapidly moving the magnetic field within the blade to make the teeth rotate at dangerous speeds increasing the potential to tear through defenses and enemies.
  Domain: Zantetsuken. Satetsu Ryuuken, Zantetsuken (All-Cutting Iron Blade).

Tetsume (Iron Claws)
Rank: B
Type: Offensive / NinTaijutsu / Kekkei Genkai
Range: Self
Handseals: See Special.
Chakra: Mid+Low [Mid Upkeep]
Special: Creates claws of Iron Sand. As strong as the users Satetsu Ryuuken rank. IF the user is currently using the Iron Scales technique they do not require handseals to perform this technique.
Description: The user will create magnetic fields along their finger tips and gather Iron Sand and form them to the shape of sharp lethal claws about 3 inches long.
Domain: Zantetsuken. Satetsu Ryuuken "B" rank.

Kadou-Tetsu (Iron Twister)
Rank: S
Type: Offensive / Ninjutsu / Kekkei Genkai
Range: 30 meters
Handseals: yes
Chakra: High x2 (High upkeep)
Special: Creates a 20 meter wide twister of Iron Sand capable of tearing apart anything caught within. The user can control the twister at their own whim with a simple hand gesture, the twister can move at fast speeds. Can create another twister when retrained for a max of two twisters.
Description: This technique is a very difficult and complicated maneuver even among the Zantetsuken. First the user will create a strong negative field in the shape of a tall funnel drawing Iron Sand to it then they will create a weaker positive field around it and make it spiral rapidly making the sand move and twist churning up a blackish gray twister of metal. Due to the difficulty in the maneuver the user cannot move while using it.
Domain: Zantetsuken. Satetsu Ryuuken “S” rank.

Divine Grace
Rank: D, C, B, A, S
Type: Supplementary / Ninjutsu / Kekkei Genkai
Range: Self
Handseals: yes
Chakra: Low, Mid, Mid+Low, High, High+Low (Initial + Upkeep)
Special: Lightens a weapon to where it is as light as a feather. Must learn this technique for the rank of the weapon it will lighten. (Ex. A rank for A rank weapon)
Description: The user will create a magnetic field around their body to lessen the weight they feel when wielding a weapon. No matter the weapon as long as it is metal or has metal components (such as a kanabo) the weapon will be lightened. However this doesn't actually lighten the weapon so if thrown it will still carry the same amount of force and momentum as normal, it simply aids the user's ability to wield it.
Domain: Zantetsuken, Satetsu Ryuuken “C” rank

[addy-hime ♥]

Iron Scales

• This needs an upkeep cost, preferably 'Mid x2'.

All-Cutting Iron Blade

• I'm not okay with this blade cutting "with extreme ease and minimal resistance." Even a normal iron greatsword wouldn't do that, so remove that part. It can still cut and such, just not so easily. Only relics can do that, honestly.
  
• I think you should include a 'Mid' upkeep.
  
• Why does the special say the blade is 6 ft but the range says 4 ft? Fix please.

Zentetsuken: Rip

• This technique should be removed, because it ultimately won't work with our current damage stacking system. Once the actual blade technique reaches 'S' rank you won't be able to stack damage onto it, and there's no way to really revamp this so that it fits.

Iron Claws

• Chakra upkeep of 'Mid'.

Iron Twister

• Chakra cost should be High x2 with High upkeep.
  
• Remove the 15 mps movement speed. Instead, add a less concrete term into the Description. Such as, "moves very quickly," etc.
  
• I would prefer if the twisters were controlled in some physical way, like a movement of the hand to direct its movement. Add that in there and also say that you can only retrain it once, for a maximum of two twisters.

Divine Grace

• As this is 'C' rank, it would only work on weapons of 'C' rank or below. Since I assume you would want it to work on any weapon, you should change it to D - S.
  
• If you do decide to change it to multi-rank, the chakra consumption should be: D - Low, C - Mid, B - Low+Mid, A - High, S - Mid+High and the upkeep should be the same as the specific rank cost.

Overall

• You need to remove "stamina" from the chakra thing. I don't know where you're getting your templates from, but stamina is no longer part of our system.

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[Forsaken]

fixed, and the stamina parts were cuz I wrote this up back in the old system when we still had stamina,guess I forgot to take those out when I updated it

[addy-hime ♥]

Divine Grace

• As this is 'C' rank, it would only work on weapons of 'C' rank or below. Since I assume you would want it to work on any weapon, you should change it to D - S.
  
• If you do decide to change it to multi-rank, the chakra consumption should be: D - Low, C - Mid, B - Low+Mid, A - High, S - Mid+High and the upkeep should be the same as the specific rank cost.

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[X-Ray]

sorry missed that fixed

[addy-hime ♥]

1/3.

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[Gentlemanne]

2/3

[Exar Kun]

The effect of Zanetsuken and "Rip" seem completely identical to me. The effect of Zanetsuken states that the max rank learned determines the blade's cutting power. Rip's effect states that the rank of rip learned determines what rank of constructs the blade can cut through.

What's the difference?

[Forsaken]

resistance to impedement, I was under the impression that defenses stop whatever rank they are of damage from an attack then the rest is dealt to the defender, so rip acts to tear through the defense while not stopping the damage, if Im wrong let me know and Ill take it off

[Exar Kun]

Ah, okay. That makes more sense.

3/3