A few Raiton Jutsu

[Corvus]

Sunda(Thunder)
Rank: C
Range: Mid(5m-10m)
Type: Offensive
Handseals: 0(time equal to 3 handseals)
Chakra Consumption: Mid

[/b]Despite not using handseals, this jutsu takes the same amount of time to cast.[/ul]

Ikazuchi no Tsurugi(Sword of Thunder and Lightning)
Rank: B
Range: Close(0m-5m)
Type: Offensive
Handseals: 5
Chakra Consumption: Low to high. Half initial cost for upkeep

Denpa Heki(Electromagnetic Burst)
Rank: D
Range: Close (0m-5m)
Type: Offensive
Handseals: 0(time equal to 1 handseal)
Chakra Consumption: low

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[Yox]

[red]Sunda[/red]

[red]Sword of Thunder and Lightning[/red]

[red]Soft Weapons[/red]

[red]Archery[/red]

[red]Fist[/red]

[Corvus]

Dec 15, 2012 9:00:46 GMT -8 Yox said:

[red]Sunda[/red]

Ok, I added a note that it still requires the same amount of time to cast. I can change that if needed. I also changed the scaling to be based on the amount of XP you have into Raiton.

[red]Sword of Thunder and Lightning[/red]

Well, the weapons are immaterial normally. So it would make sense that something made of pure electrical energy could pass though steel armor. I had already stated that protectorates with a method to block electrical energy could function normally. It was only protectorates with high conductivity that it could ignore. I also added to the density modification that it removes the ability to ignore protectorates. I added that using them to cut through a wind or water jutsu destroys the created weapon as well. As for the daggers, you could hold them in between the fingers, like Larxene, from Kingdom Hearts, or Date Masamune, from Sengoku Basara.

[red]Soft Weapons[/red]

Updated.

[red]Archery[/red]

Added a maximum number of masses that can be in existence at once, how many can be made at once, and how long it takes to make. If it's allowed, I'd like to make some supplementary jutsu to improve the generation speed and quantity. The numerical cap should scale on it's own.

[red]Fist[/red]

Modified.

EDIT: Added some supplementary jutsu to improve Raikou Shahou

[Yox]

Thunder: I'm still not sure about the system with this. I think it's delving too much down the path of masteries with the whole reduction of time to perform the jutsu determined by total experience. Why can't it just be the same across all standards haha? Other than that it seems to be fine.

Sword: Alright well Suiton would not necessarily cancel out the technique. I was just stating that some elements do in fact affect Raiton. Suiton could even be used to boost the damage of the sword. Six daggers still seems to be too much as there are only 4 gaps between fingers in each hand. I suppose if you still wanted to go through with this 4 would have to be the maximum created in your hand at one time. Also I think you might have to bring it back to 1 polearm being created. Standard polearms require two hands to use simply due to their weight and size, however your lightning ones wont have the same weight bearing on the caster. This means that you probably could wield two polearms at the same time, however it makes it rather overpowered in comparison to other weapons. The fact that you're able to jump around with these two long ass weapons with no bearing weight on your body means that you'd have a large advantage over an opponent. I just think it would be better if you could only create one big weapon 8)

Archery: One bolt for every 5 exp devoted to Raiton? No way! Just remove the entire part about being able to produce any number you want. As long as it's stated that each bolt costs 1 low to create it should be fine. Also bring back the range of the arrow. 40 metres is a little too much as this is simply a c-ranked technique. Somewhere around 15-20 metres is more appropriate.

Different stages of archery: I think you'll have to just scrap these all together. We used to work like this on the site where a technique's ability could be increased with retraining and 'mastering' the technique over and over. Unfortunately that system was removed and due to these techniques mimicking that whole sort of thing, I don't think they'll fly here 8(

Fist: I see this mirroring the Raikage's lightning armour technique a lot, just on a weaker scale. We'll just have to see what the other moderators think of it.

** Also sorry for the late reply, I was really hungover yesterday and not in the mood to do any sort of thinking. ^^

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[Corvus]

Thunder: it takes the same amount of time regardless of how much XP you have into Raiton. You just don't need as much feeling behind the verbal key if you have a certain amount of XP, and you can skip it completely if you have enough.

Sword: Well, its six daggers total, between both hands. So it's perfectly feasible to use all six at once. I'll drop the polearms down to one.

Archery: Dropping range to 20 meters and removing the reference to the number of masses that can be created at once.

Archery mods: I see. I'd like to keep them for now, and see what other staff says, no disrespect intended. But it doesn't seem like it would really be all that powerful, when compared against the XP cost. For example, by the time you get all of them, your arrows may only take 1/5th of a second to create, but they still consume a Low amount of chakra each, do little damage individually, and you would have spent close to the same amount of XP than if they had just been an S ranked jutsu with the reduced generation time as default. At least, that's how it appears from my perspective.

Fist: I can certainly see the similarities, but this jutsu doesn't actually provide any defensive buffs, unlike the Raikage's armor. It just adds an electrical charge to melee attacks, and gives access to a secondary burst of electricity at the expense of the electrical damage.

Don't worry about the lateish reply. I wasn't really able to get on yesterday anyway, and I can sympathize with the trouble of a hangover.

Oh, and I have a quick question, if you don't mind: Is it possible for members to submit customs Clans for the site? I can't seem to find any rules for it one way or the other.

[Yox]

Thunder: *shrugs* okay then.

Sword: I see. Well originally you had it written down with 6 in each hand so that's what confused me abut that. 6 in total is fine.

Archery + Modifications: Alright ^^

Clans: I'm not currently sure. There's no template provided to create a clan but I can't really see why not. As long as you get the jutsu accepted for that family I don't see why you couldn't. However as there isn't any area in the customs accepted area for clans/bloodlines I'm not too sure. You'll have to PM Genbu for the best possible answer.

With these final changes I suppose you can have a 1/2 for these custom techniques. Now it's time for another mod to scrutinise 8)

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[addy-hime ♥]

Thunder

Sword of Thunder and Lightning

[/url] in Fuuton. Also, I'm not going to allow this technique to have the ability to coat material weapons as well, simply because it means there are a lot of effects going on. So remove that last bit of the description.

On a similar note, I don't see a reason to have so many supplementary techniques for this one. You can incorporate both of them into the base technique. Simply add mention of the soft weapon, and also an 'optional' chakra cost for if the user wishes to change the density of their creation(s).[/ul]

Lightning Archery

Lightning Fist

Overall, there are some template issues in this post too that you should fix. In addition to the Japanese name, you should include the English name in parentheses, EX: Raiton Bunshin no Jutsu (Lightning Clone Technique); make sure there are spaces between your heading and the text, EX: Chakra Consumption: Low; and remove the note where it is not necessary.[/blockquote][/blockquote][/justify]

[Corvus]

Thunder: modded.

Sword:edited. I made the sword one mid per sword, soft weapon two mids, and the polearm one high. I also increaed it to a B rank jutsu. I can still increase it to A rank if you insist, but I personally think B rank is enough as, unlike the Kaze no Yaiba, Ikazuchi no Tsurugi is both immaterial and not invisible. Even with the increased density, it's no more durable or powerful than a normal weapon.

Archery and Fist: Removed. Though Archery was intended to be more of a 'charge for a bit then heavy bombardment' type of jutsu.

Others: On it

[addy-hime ♥]

1/2.

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[Comatose]

2/2