Shiki Aragmi [FINISHED AND READY]

[ionsama]

PERSONOLOGY[/u][/color]

[/color] Shiki Aragami
[/li][li] 15 Years Old, June 6th.
[/li][li] None
[/li][li] Konohagakure No Sato ( Hidden Leaf Village)
[/li][li] Genin , Trainee Medical Nin
[/li][li] Her psyichal attacks are weak, but she is a talented Medical Nin. She is pretty weak in normal combat.
[/li][li] Awakening: Fuuton
[/li][li] ¬ Primarary ¬ Ninjustu ¬ Secondary ¬ Genjutsu ¬ Tertiary ¬ Taijutsu
[/li][/ul]


PHYSICALITY[/u][/color]

• 4'8
  
• 101 pounds
  
• SPOILER: Click to show
  <-- Face shot and normal apparel.
  Shiki is a slim girl with pale skin and beautiful, deep and alluring emerald eyes. She constantly has blush on heer cheeks, because she spends a lot of time outside. Although her cheeks are cherry red, her skin is pale and does'nt really tan. She has blonde hair that she regularly maintains carefully. It is tidy and clean cut, with a bowl like fringe, or sometimes it is sweeped to the side to make it more messy. Occasionly she puts her hair in a mouse haircut when she is doing sports or fighting. She has a medium sized bust, and is noted for having fragile skin that easily bleeds. Shiki has a large scar across her back, from a battle with a rival clan.
  
• Her family has always prided themselves on being master seamstress's, and all the clothes she wears is home made by her. She has never worn anything else apart from traditional japanese clothing, like kimono's. Commonly, she wears a blue kimono with pink stripes and pink butterflys. She sometimes wears a pink kimono with flower patterns and a red over jacket for special occasions. In battles that require a lot of movement, she wears a bluehakama and a slim fit shirt that clings to her skin. It has a flower on it. She also wears a large scarf when she wears this outfit. Its more conventional for battle and allows movement, but limits the space for herbs and medicenes, that she carries as a just in case.
  
• She has a dual scar that cross over each other like an X. She got this in a fight while protecting her little brother, Asashi.
  

COGNITION[/u][/color]

• Shiki is a bubbly girl. She has an ' infectious smile ' as quoted by lots of people, and her happy go luck nature and cheerful nature nearly automatically rub off on others. She instanteously keeps a happy nature in any group. She's a sweet girl with a happy nature. She loves to help others, hence her position as a medical ninja. However, she is naive and guillible and only see's the best in people. She never realises if something is amiss or if someone is bad or evil. She believes in only good people and a happy world.
  She can get annoying with constantly trying to cheer people up. She loves sweet deserts like parfaits and cheesecake. She loves to cook and make people happy. She also enjoys gardening, as she thinks it gives life. She is also a very capable seamstress, that runs in the family. She has a sweet tooth and won't eat much besides sweets, yet she maintains a healthy body by constantly working herself to the bone.
  She is fiercely hard working and tenacious, constantly retrying even after getting something wrong. She loves the sense of accomplishment she gets after pushing her limits. Shiki is very protective over friends, and even protected her little brother Asashi from the rivals of the Aragami family, resulting in a large scar on her back.
  Despite being protective, she can't hold her own in a psychical fight. She often defends with a kunai and is easily staggered by heavy blows. Her fighting style is a flurry of random attacks with a kunai. She isn't particulary fast or strong, so it is to no avail. She uses her bladed baton as a better weapons, so if a enemy is too close she knocks them away with it. She excells at healing herself and others, and even attacking ninjutsu, but only if she can get the hand seals out before she is attacked. She has a fragile body, so healing is essential.
  
• Konohagakure
  
• N/A
  
• She has a tendency too narrate her day dreams out loud in great detail, and then writing them down. If she is describing an attack or battle, instead of using proper words she will go 'Bang! Boom!'' And make various sound effects. She often falls asleep in important situations.
  
• She loves sweets like mochi, and foreign sweets like cheesecake and parfaits. She enjoys gardening, sewing, and cooking. She likes hanging out with her friends and napping. She also loves toys, cute fluffy things, and working hard as well as helping others. She does'nt like storms, as she is afraid of lightning. She doesn't like spiders or snakes or creepy animals. She hates vegetables that aren't sweet. She hates bland, flavourless food.
  

ARMAMENTS[/u][/color]

• Naginata
  Rank: C
  Type: Primary / Melee
  Description: A naginata consists of a wooden shaft three feet or so in length, with a curved blade on the end, and finally, a sword-like guard between the blade and shaft.
  Cost: 1,000 Ryo
  
  
• Kunai (Throwing Knife) ( Two Packs )
  Rank: D
  Type: Secondary / Melee + Ranged
  Special: 2 per Pack.
  Description: This throwing knife is one of the common weapons of a ninja. It is often kept in a holster on the leg in a pouch attached to the belt. What makes it so versatile and universal is the fact the Kunai can be used in conjunction with explosive tags and other weapons to form deadly combos out of simple, easily accessible items.
  Cost: 100 Ryo per Pack
  
  
• Shuriken (Ninja Star) ( Two Packs )
  Rank: D
  Type: Secondary / Ranged
  Special: 5 per Pack.
  Description: A shuriken, like kunai, is one of the more basic weapons employed by ninja of all classes. They are sharpened, four-pronged metal stars, no more than a few inches long, and are extremely useful for throwing. Although small, they can be used to distract, or, if accurate enough, to kill. They have an open circle in the center, used for grabbing with a finger, to avoid cutting oneself, or to put thread through. The circle is also a benefit in aerodynamics, as it ensures more accurate trajectories.
  Cost: 100 Ryo per Pack
  
  
• Makibishi (Ground Spikes)
  Rank: D
  Type: Secondary / Ranged
  Special: 20 per Pack.
  Description: Makibishi are small, sharp objects that are mainly used to inhibit someone from walking in a certain direction or area, since they would injure the ninja's feet if they tried to walk over them. Although ineffective when used individually, they can severely cripple a whole enemy unit with appropriate use.
  Cost: 200 Ryo per Pack
  
  
• Shousen Jutsu (Mystical Hand Technique)
  Rank: D, C, B, A, S
  Type: Supplementary / Medical Ninjutsu
  Range: Self
  Special: Heals and counters damage equal to highest rank known.
  Description: Shousen Jutsu is one of the most fundamental yet vital Medical Ninjutsu techniques utilized by medical ninja. This technique allows the ninja to heal wounds by focusing their own chakra to their hands. If the ninja is highly skilled, they are able to heal more critical injuries. Highly skilled medical-nin can use their techniques to perform surgeries that otherwise would not be possible.
  Domain: Medics
  
  
• Naite no Jutsu (Dead Hands Technique)
  Rank: D, C, B, A, S
  Type: Offensive / Medical Ninjutsu
  Range: Self
  Special: Performs the opposite of Shosen no Jutsu, instantly breaking down cellular structures upon impact, allowing the Medic to do both miraculous and deadly things. Drains an amount of chakra equal to the technique's rank per turn while active.
  Description: Although most Medical Shinobi utilize this technique for combat, Naite no Jutsu may also be used to help the user combat things like cancerous growths by simply killing the cancer's cells. While active, the user is capable of causing massive cellular destruction of an area of one inch per second per rank of the technique.
  Domain: Medical. Shosen of the same rank.
  
  
• Doku Kiri (Poison Mist Technique)
  Rank: D, C, B, A, S
  Type: Offensive / Medical Ninjutsu
  Range: 0 - 50 meters
  Special: When first learned, poison gas cloud reaches up to 10 meters. Each rank re-learned adds an additional 10 meters to the maximum, for a maximum of fifty meters. Strength of poison is determined by highest rank attained.
  Description: Ninpou: Doku Kiri is an advanced Medical Ninjutsu technique utilized by skilled medics. After the needed handseals, the medic inhales briefly before expelling poision gas from their mouth at high speeds. This can serve as cover to escape and as an offensive technique against her opponent, or as a trap when luring opponents your way.
  Domain: Medics. Must know Saikan Chuushutsu no Jutsu (Fine Affliction Extraction).
  
  
• Saikan Chuushutsu no Jutsu (Fine Affliction Extraction)
  Rank: D, C , B , A ,S
  Type: Supplementary / Medical Ninjutsu
  Range: Self
  Special: Rank determines healing capability when dealing with different strengths of poison.
  Description: Saikan Chuushutsu no Jutsu is a skill used by medical ninja to remove harmful poisons from a patient's body. The ninja will infuse their chakra into liquid bubble, which they will insert into the patient. They will then use the liquid as a medium to draw out the poison from the cells. This mix can then be removed from the body. Depending on the deadliness of the poison, further treatment with an antidote or medicine may be required.
  Domain: Medics
  
  Daitoppa (Great Breakthrough)
  Rank: C
  Type: Offensive / Fuuton Ninjutsu
  Range: 10+ meters
  Chakra: Mid
  Special: Wind blast can travel 10 meters, plus 10 more each time relearned. Due to the pressure of the wind blasts on the lungs, this can only be used once per thread, plus once more each time retrained.
  Description: A staple Fuuton technique, Daitoppa allows the user to blow a single strong current from their mouth, expelled in a cone like fashion forward which carries enough power to knock anything in its way down. This technique is very simple to execute – the user makes the right seals, simply takes a deep breath, and let’s go!
  Domain: Fuuton.
  
  Kaiten Shuriken (Rotating Shuriken)
  Rank: D
  Type: Supplementary / Fuuton Ninjutsu
  Range: 10+ meters
  Chakra: Low
  Special: Wind boost travels up to 10 meters and can control up to 5 projectiles at a time; when relearned, the wind gains 10 extra meters of travel and 5 more projectiles to control.
  Description: One of the simplest Fuuton techniques, this supplementary technique allows the user to take any secondary/projectile weaponry they have on them and coat them in Fuuton chakra. This allows the user to shoot them at high speeds under the wind manipulation, adding rotation and tumbling power to increase the speed of normal weapon attacks, as well as its deadliness.
  Domain: Fuuton.
  
  
  
  
  

[Apple]

[/b][/color] Hey! First thing which I've noticed is your types, you've said that Medical ninjutsu is your primary, Ninjutsu your secondary, and 'Attacking physically' your tertiary, which won't fit the bill I'm afraid! You have to use the three following; "Ninjutsu" "Genjutsu" and "Taijutsu". So, from what you've written, I'd say you're probably looking towards the order I put above, if that makes sense.

¬ Primarary ¬ Medical Ninjustu ¬ Secondary ¬ Ninjutsu ¬ Tertiary ¬ Attacking Physically.

[2] Just a small thing; You've put down Konohagakure twice and I'm a bit confused about what that is supposed to mean?

# Konohagakure
# Konohagakure

[3] You've written down that your character is part of the Arigami clan. On the 'clan' box, we don't mean as in your family name, but an already-existing clan like the Inuzuka, Yamanaka, Nara, or bloodline traits like the Uchiha or Hyuuga. So, leave that empty or put "N/A" since you don't have one of those.

[4] For your items and techniques, I'll clear it up for you- It seems that you've copied your things from another site, or you've just written your own things in our template here, which I'm afraid can't be done. Delete these, and please look through our indexes for techniques, and then through our weapon indexes for of course, weaponry.

[/u] free packs and ONE free "C" ranked primary weapon, as I've seen you do. On our secondary weapons page it tells you how many weapons you get in a pack (For senondary ones), so you can add as many packs of whatever you want, assuring that you limit yourself to FIVE packs in total.

Your techniques aren't in the indexes, so please remove them. Under ninjutsu in the indexes you should find the medical jutsu list, and it has a whole host of techniques that you can add.[/ul]

[5] Since you're a new character and you haven't stated that you're part of a clan, you get 500EXP to start off with to spend on techniques.
The rankings are as follows:

[/B] 25
C: 50
B: 100
A: 150
S: 300[/ul]
But, being a new character you can't get any techniques that are over B-Ranked. So, say if you get five B-Ranked, it would total to 500EXP, and all of your free EXP will be spent.

[6] Upon creation, you get a free release (Fire, water, earth etc) or peception (Genjutsu, like, abilities to effect sight, smell, hearing etc). It's better to pick one up now rather than have to spend your EXP on it later, simply because of the fact that although it's quick to gain EXP, it sometimes feels tedious having to collect it all. So, look at the release or perceptions on the indexes, and choose yours! Be sure to state it in your bio that you have that release/perception.

I hope this clears things up for you! Should I see more, I'll point them out.
[/ul]

[ionsama]

Thankyou very much for pointing out the issues, Apple. I had trouble understanding some of it! okay, I have adjusted it.

[Apple]

[/b][/color] You've forgotten to bold the ranks of the techinques that you know. Say if you want "B"-Ranked healing hands, you put the BOLD code around the ranks that you know, I'll give you an example below. Remember that if you want the "B" ranked version, you have to first have the "D" and "C" ranks, so in total you'd be paying 175EXP for the three. 100 for B, 50 for C, and 25 for D. Remember that you have 500EXP to spend!

Shousen Jutsu (Mystical Hand Technique)
Rank: D, C, B, A, S
Type: Supplementary / Medical Ninjutsu
Range: Self
Special: Heals and counters damage equal to highest rank known.
Description: Shousen Jutsu is one of the most fundamental yet vital Medical Ninjutsu techniques utilized by medical ninja. This technique allows the ninja to heal wounds by focusing their own chakra to their hands. If the ninja is highly skilled, they are able to heal more critical injuries. Highly skilled medical-nin can use their techniques to perform surgeries that otherwise would not be possible.
Domain: Medics

[8] You still haven't done steps 1, 2, 3 & 6 of my last post. Please edit accordingly and choose a free release/perception!

[9] You've listed three secondary weapons, totalling to three packs, so you have two packs left to use. However, if you want to have another pack or two of say, in example, Makibishi, write down "Two packs" by the title of the item, so it'd look like:

Makibishi (Ground Spikes) [Two packs]
Rank: D
Type: Secondary / Ranged
Special: 20 per Pack.
Description: Makibishi are small, sharp objects that are mainly used to inhibit someone from walking in a certain direction or area, since they would injure the ninja's feet if they tried to walk over them. Although ineffective when used individually, they can severely cripple a whole enemy unit with appropriate use.
Cost: 200 Ryo per Pack

[/ul]

[Apple]

[/b][/color] You still haven't done the three first things I'd pointed at, so I'll repeat them here:

[/b] You need to change "Aragami Clan" to none because it isn't one of the indexed clans that we have on this site. Of course you can always be in that family with your surname, but it's not a clan which has techniques on the indexes, so you can't place it there.

2. Please change your types from what it says below, to "Ninjutsu, genjutsu, taijutsu"- This is me assuming you want to be those types, so if you want to be better at genjutsu, change it to "Genjutsu, Ninjutsu, Taijutsu", or in whatever order that you want.

/¬ Primarary ¬ Medical Ninjustu ¬ Secondary ¬ Ninjutsu ¬ Tertiary ¬ Attacking Physically.

3. You have 150 EXP left to spend on lovely techniques!

4. You have one pack left to use.
[/ul]
[/ul]

[ionsama]

There we go. All done ^^.

[Apple]

[/b][/color]! Great work![/ul]

[chiatsuki]

you've only spent 425 exp out of 500. would you like to keep the extra 75 exp to yourself or spend it on some other jutsu?

[ionsama]

No Thanks.
I've already covered it with Apple thankyou ^^.

[Axcel]

2/2 sorry for the wait