Doton for the masses

[Ginjou]

(All of these Techniques were seen in the anime and manga but not on the Index, just thought I'd add them here)

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Mudshot Technique

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Rank: D
Type: Offensive | Ninjutsu
Range: 0 - 20m
Special: If hit, the target's movements are considerably slowed for one turn plus one more each time re-trained.
Description: The user shoots mud from their mouth at an enemy; the chakra-enhanced mud is able to trap and slow an opponent down.
Domain: Doton

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Multiple Mudshot Technique[/u]
Rank: D
Type: Offensive | Ninjutsu
Range: 0 - 20m
Special: If hit, the target's movements are considerably slowed for three turns plus one more each time re-trained. User may shoot 1 - 6 mud balls with each technique, giving them the chance to slow several targets.
Description: This jutsu is basically a widespread version of the Mudshot Technique; allowing the user to fire at multiple targets.
Domain: Doton

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Earth Release: Earth Shaking Palm[/u]
Rank: D
Type: Supplementary | Ninjutsu
Range: 0 - 10m
Special: If hit, the target will most likely lose their footing or balance. Technique affects a triangular area directly in front of the user, with a length of 10m and a width of 5m at it's widest point.
Description: This jutsu is used to distract opponents as well as leave them disorientated. The user performs the hand sign and then slams their palm on the ground. The result is the ground becoming heavily turned up with chunks of rubble popping out of the ground, creating tremor-like effect, unbalancing targets. This distraction can be useful for the user to then make an escape, or to initiate an attack.
Domain: Doton, Earth Dominion

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Doton: Doryūha [ Earth Release: Earth Flow Wave ][/u]
Rank: C
Type: Offensive | Supplementary | Ninjutsu
Range: See Special!
Special: Range equals the maximum known rank of Earth Dominion. Wave is of an average speed. Wave can easily be broken by offensive techniques of equal rank or above. Cannot be manipulated to go any higher or further away from the origin point than the user's maximum Earth Dominion rank. The user must maintain the last handseal used within the string to keep the wave active. If the user's handseal is interrupted, the wave will crumble.
Description: The user creates and rides a wave of earth that can branch off to attack from a distance. Although described as a wave, it is more snake-like than wave-like in appearance. Rocks jut out from every conceivable angle on this tendril, making it easy to climb, as well as easy to break apart. This can be used to gain the high-ground on a target or to safely avoid attacks from Taijutsu-users, such as the Hyuuga.
Domain: Doton, Earth Dominion rank 'C' or above

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Retsudo Tenshin [ Earth Needle ]

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Rank: D
Type: Offensive
Range: 0 - 10m
Special: May only be used after Earth Release: Earth Flow Wave. Very fast moving but very linear. Must stay connected to the wave. Cannot change directions. Only one of these needles may be used at a time.
Description: After using the Earth Release: Earth Flow Wave technique to shape earth, the user creates a large needle out of the end of the tendril of earth, forcing it to rush towards it's intended target. It is a very linear attack that is easily broken and easily avoided, though it's speed is a valuable asset, matching the speed of a kunai.
Domain: Doton, Earth Dominion, Earth Release: Earth Flow Wave
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Doton: Ganban Kyū [ Earth Release: Bedrock Coffin ][/u]
Rank: C
Type: Offensive | Ninjutsu
Range: See Special!
Special: Range equals maximum Earth Dominion rank known. It takes three turns to fully crush the opponent, which is split into two sections, one turn to actually reach the opponent and then two turns to actually crush them. If the target is hit, they will be crushed until dead or until the user releases the technique but the sections of stone are very slow and easy to escape from. Largest section of stone possible is 7ft high and 2.5ft wide.
Description: This jutsu allows the user to control multiple sections of rock and move them around their opponent. The user then forms two gigantic sections that crush the opponent.
Domain: Doton, Earth Dominion rank 'C' or above

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Doton: Tsuchi Enchou [ Earth Release: Earth Dome ][/u]
Rank: C, B, A, S
Type: Defensive | Ninjutsu
Range: See Special!
Special: Range and radius of Dome is equal to highest rank of Earth Dominion known. Dome blocks all Ninjutsu and Taijutsu of equal or lower rank. May protect several people.
Description: The user creates an earth dome using chakra, which protects them from external attacks. The dome itself is made of several layers of dense dirt or stone, packed tightly to give it extra strength.
Domain: Doton, Earth Dominion rank 'C' or above

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Doton: Doryūsō [ Earth Release: Rising Stone Spears ][/u]
Rank: C
Type: Offensive | Ninjutsu
Range: See Special!
Special: Range equals maximum Earth Dominion rank known. Five spikes can be made originally, with two more added each time re-trained. This technique can only be re-trained six times. Maximum range of any spear is 7ft. Speed is roughly that of a kunai.
Description: This technique lets the user condense mud or stone, from the ground, and shape them into spikes that will protrude from the ground in order to skewer the target. The spikes cannot penetrate targets of greater density.
Domain: Doton, Earth Dominion rank 'C' or above

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Doton: Retsudo Tenshō [ Earth Release: Tearing Earth Turning Palm ][/u]
Rank: C
Type: Offensive | Ninjutsu
Range: See Special!
Special: Range equals maximum rank of Earth Dominion. It takes a minimum of one turn to make the earth around them collapse in on itself.
Description: This technique causes the ground surrounding the enemy to spiral inwards on itself, burying them alive or crushing them. This jutsu is capable of causing quite a bit of damage to the area. This technique is much more damaging if used in rocky mountainous areas, or inside a cave.
Domain: Doton, Earth Dominion rank 'C' or above

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Earth Release: Destructive Rising Rock Pillars[/u]
Rank: B
Type: Offensive | Ninjutsu
Range: See Special!
Special: Range is equal to maximum rank of Earth Dominion known. Shockwaves continue outward for 0-20m. Shockwaves knock over anyone hit, both friend or foe. If the target is within 10m of the pillar, they will be seriously injured. User must maintain a handseal in order to keep this technique active.
Description: This jutsu causes gigantic pillars of rock to forcefully emerge from the ground, causing shockwaves in the process that flatten the ground around them and cause devastating damage to the enemy. Because it goes in all directions and causes such large shockwaves, this jutsu is perfect against a large number of foes, though there is the possibility of hurting one's own allies.
Domain: Doton, Earth Dominion rank 'B' or higher

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Doton: Dosenkiryū [ Earth Release: Earth Dragon ][/u]
Rank: B
Type: Offensive | Ninjutsu
Range: 0 - 20m
Special: Takes two turns to reach the target at 20m away, minus one if re-trained. May only be re-trained once. The dragon's head is 5ft in height and roughly the width of an average human male. It's jaw can extend to a maximum of 7ft in height when fully open.
Description: Using material in the surrounding area, the user creates a dragon-shaped missile and makes it shoot towards the opponent at high speeds. The dragon itself is rather large and capable of swallowing a target whole.
Domain: Doton, Earth Dominion rank 'B' or above

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Doton: Doryūkatsu [ Earth Release: Earth Flow Divide ][/u]
Rank: B
Type: Offensive | Supplementary | Ninjutsu
Range: See Special!
Special: Range equals highest known rank of Earth Dominion. Cooldown is two posts. Maximum width and depth is equal to the maximum rank of Earth Dominion known.
Description: By flowing one's chakra into the Tectonic Plates flowing underground, one can tear the earth apart, creating large chasms. The length, width, direction, and curve of the chasm are all up to the user. Manipulating the Tectonic Plates requires fine chakra control, but if one has such skill, they can use this technique to divide the space between the enemy and their own team in two, destroy enemy camps or defences, and even to attack.
Domain: Doton, Earth Dominion rank 'B' or above

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[.DEVIOUS]

Earth Shaking Palm: "Special: If the target is hit, they are stunned for one turn plus one more each time retrained and their eyes are irritated for three turns." I am not alright with a D Rank technique with that kind of power. You also don't exactly state how you 'hit' the opponent with the technique since all you do is slam your hand on the ground and cause some rubble to spring up on the ground. I'd also think that this technique would require Earth Dominion as a base.

Doton: Doryūha: I'm pretty certain that this ability far exceeds the capability of a D Rank jutsu. If you were just creating a single wave and causing it to shoot at an opponent, maybe... but being able to ride a wave that consistently changes at your direction without any sort of drawback seems a little powerful. I'd like to see the rank increased, probably to B, and either an imposed timelimit on the technique or the requirement to maintain a handseal while the technique is active. You also don't give any sort of indication of how fast the speed of the wave is normally, nor the increments of increased speed based on Earth Dominion.

Retsudo Tenshin [ Earth Needle ]: Does the 'needle' actually shoot at the opponent or is it limited to only the area of the earth wave? What are the maximum dimensions of the needle? Denote an actual speed for the needle's movement - 'very fast' is incredibly vague.

Doton: Arijigoku no Jutsu [ Earth Release: Antlion Technique ]: This needs a defined strength of suction (should it require the same amount of strength to escape as your rank of the technique?) and speed of suction (how many turns does it take each rank to suck somebody in?). I would also prefer some sort of limitation on the size other than the user's Earth Dominion rank, some sort of maximum limit on at least the C and B rank versions of the technique since having S rank of Earth Dominion shouldn't really give the techniques that much range.

Doton: Ganban Kyū [ Earth Release: Bedrock Coffin ]: Maximum dimensions on the size of the rocks you can control? How fast do the rocks move normally, and how fast does each retraining of the jutsu increase the speed? Is there a maximum number of times you can train the technique, or can you essentially learn this technique 100 times and have instantaneous rock crushing?

Doton: Doryūsō [ Earth Release: Rising Stone Spears ]: Maximum number of 'spears' you can create? Is there a maximum size for each spear? All the range tells me is how far away you can be and still create the Jutsu.

Doton: Retsudo Tenshō [ Earth Release: Tearing Earth Turning Palm ]: Speed of the collapsing rock? Otherwise looks okay.

Earth Release: Destructive Rising Rock Pillars: "Shockwaves knock over anyone hit, both friend or foe and stuns them for three turns." Knocking an opponent over is acceptable, but the 3 turn stun is absolutely not. I'm rather against any technique taking away total movement capabilities unless the technique itself is specifically designed for that singular purpose and maintains a heavy drawback (see: holding a handseal for the duration of the containment, or something along those lines). Remove the stun and this will be fine.

Doton: Dosenkiryū [ Earth Release: Earth Dragon ]: Maximum size of the dragon? What's the average speed of the technique, and how much faster does it get with each rank of Earth Dominion? Please note that B rank should be considered baseline since you need B rank to learn this technique in the first place.

Doton: Doryūkatsu [ Earth Release: Earth Flow Divide ]: What is "Dragon Veins (龍脈, Ryūmyaku)"? I checked all of your customs as well as the Doton Index and don't see it. Other than the fact that how you perform the technique makes no sense, I'm alright with it.

Doton: Nentsuchi Otoshi [ Earth Release: Sticky Earth Drop ]: Where does this mud come from? As far as I know, mud doesn't normally just come from a random opening in the sky and fall down on the opponent. If your chakra is creating the mud, you should state that you create it from your chakra. I also will not allow a full-thread stun - you can say that a target captured is immobile until the rock is broken and then give some sort of maximum strength of the rock, but you can't take them completely out of the fight like that, and you should probably remove the talk about Sixteen Pillar Bind and Fired Pottery Technique, and just give a certain rank of Katon jutsu to harden the mud.

[Ginjou]

Forgot to mention it, but these were all actually in the anime and manga as canon techniques and were not in the index. I just thought they should be, so I added them.

Anyway, I've increased the rank of Earth Wave to C and added a better explanation. I don't think the one that was given really gave is justice in terms of how it looked and worked. I hope I've explained it a little better and added in enough drawbacks.

The Dragon Veins weren't actually a technique, sorry, forgot to edit that out. It's actually a concept of Feng Shui, which, from my understanding, basically noted the thousands of little caverns underneath the earth. I've taken this out and replaced it with the Tectonic Plates however, as to not confuse anyone you wishes to learn this.

I decided just to leave out Sticky Mud Drop. I don't think it was well enough explained in the anime to be honest. Looked more like a Kuchiyose variant that summoned mud. So yeah, removed that.

Hope this is that fixed then.

EDIT: Just realized that the Ant-lion technique is unique to the Fuuma clan, so I have removed it.

[Sayomi]

Doton: Dosenkiryū [ Earth Release: Earth Dragon ]
Rank: B
Type: Offensive | Ninjutsu
Range: 0 - 20m
Special: Takes two turns to reach the target at 20m away, minus one if re-trained. May only be re-trained once.
Description: Using material in the surrounding area, the user creates a dragon-shaped missile and makes it shoot towards the opponent at high speeds.
Domain: Doton, Earth Dominion rank 'B' or above

Describe how big the dragon is.

[Ginjou]

Edited~

[Sayomi]

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[.DEVIOUS]

For Earth Release: Destructive Rising Rock Pillars, would you mind editing out 'or dying' from the potential list of effects? Just saying that anyone caught within 10 meters of the shockwave can be severely injured and leave it at that, otherwise we're going to have people fighting for the death penalty all the time with it. If you take that out I'll give this a 2/2.

[Ginjou]

Done~

[.DEVIOUS]

2.2