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[la]

Forced Renewal[/u]
Rank: D ,C ,B ,A ,S
Type: Healing/ Clan Medical Ninjutsu
Range: See special.
Special: This technique can be used on any target within touch range, although a victim may resist if they do not want to be aided. The user of this technique cannot utilize it to purge effects higher rank than the rank known, or ailments in themselves. The number ailments that can be removed per use is equal to the Hōzuki's Hydration rank. The time it takes to remove an ailment depends on it's rank.

E rank:Instant
D rank:One turn
C rank:Two turns
B rank:Three turns
A rank:Four turns
S rank:Five turns

Description: Utilizing this technique, the Hōzuki is able to reach into the body of their beneficiary through any orifice and remove a number of ailments (poisons, diseases, fatigue, or any foreign body) and take it into themselves. While this technique is working, negative ailment effects (except fatigue) are suspended. Using a high rank of this ability also removes lower rank threats (i.e. Using A will also remove a D if victim suffers from both). The removed threats are absorbed into a ball of jelly that must be expelled in the following turn or the Hōzuki themselves will become infected. This ability can be used once per thread (or every 12 hours) for every training plus Hydration rank (Max: 10).
Domain: Hōzuki bloodline. Must know Fine Affliction Extract 'D' or better. Must know Ultimate Hydration Technique 'D' or better.

Waters of Life[/u]
Rank: D, C, B, A, S
Type: Supplementary/ Healing
Range: Self
Special: The degree of healing is dependent on the highest rank known.

D: One D injury
C: Two D rank injuries and one C rank injury.
B: Two C rank injuries or below and one B rank injury.
A: Three B rank injuries or below and one A rank injury
S: Three B rank injuries or below, two A rank injuries , and one S rank injury.

Healing a B rank injury inflicts a D rank injury on the user. Healing an A rank injury inflicts two D rank injuries on the user. Healing an S rank injury inflicts a C rank injury on the user.

Description:When an injured person comes in contact jelly or fluid imbued with Waters of Life, it will seep across or into their body, acclimate to them and then replace ANY lost structure on a cellular level automatically. 'Healing pulses' will occur automatically after 10 seconds of contact, deducting automatically from the Hōzuki's chakra pool as their body makes the damaged one whole. As long as contact is maintained, the beneficiary can draw chakra from the Hōzuki's pool to fuel their attacks. Healing pulses also tend to remove fatigue from the beneficiary. Healing pulses will always cost the maximum amount unless the Hōzuki focuses on nothing but reducing the flow to a lower rank (minimum D). Once achieved, this ability is always active. It is exclusive with all other similar abilities (i.e. those that imbue Hōzuki jelly with a special property) and those other abilities cannot be learned without automatically forfeiting all gained levels of Waters of Life without an EXP refund. Offensive techniques utilizing Suiton release are suffer a penalty of one rank in effectiveness. If attempting to utilize a jutsu that cannot be lowered another rank the jutsu fails.
Domain: Hōzuki bloodline. Must know Acid War rank 'D' or similar skill. Medical ninja only.


Superfluous Growth[/u]
Rank: D, C, B, A, S
Type: Supplementary Ninjutsu
Range: Self
Special: The amount of extra mass that can be attached is roughly 1 sq. foot per rank.
Description: After performing the performing the proper handseals, the user is able to draw a portion of water to their body, and then add that portion to their whole. This new region remains connected, even when the Hōzuki becomes jelly or fully human. This growth can be shaped somewhat by the hands of the user into any shape or position they can manage. This newly formed flesh is spongy and lacks the internal support of bone. It cannot be moved once set into place, and while it can be severed without any major consequence to the owner, sensation can be felt through through these new appendages and opened wounds must be healed through other means. This ability cannot replace lost body parts or organs.
Domain: Hōzuki bloodline. Requires Hydration Technique Rank 'C' or higher.

Flavor Seal[/u]
Rank: D, C, B, A, S
Type: Supplementary
Range: See special
Special: This seal breaks whenever the object possessing the seal is placed against the tongue.
Description: This ability can be used to seal 'taste' oriented genjutsu of rank equal to the highest learned rank of Flavor Seal into an object until it is ingested. When used upon an object a sunburst-like seal in imprinted upon the surface until the object come into contact with the tongue of an individual. To place the seal, the user must activate the genjutsu and then immediately activate the seal while pouring their chakra into the chosen object.
Domain: Universal Juuinjutsu.

[Sayomi]

1.2

all seems good

[adero]

You people... suck. You notice how the jutsu in the index are super short and to the point?

Don't make us read a novel. Don't make anyone read a novel for just a jutsu...

TL:DR - Condense it.

[Sayomi]

Its not good to tell members they suck you know, promotes a bad atmosphere about the site.

[la]

Apr 18, 2011 19:03:44 GMT -8 adero said:

You people... suck. You notice how the jutsu in the index are super short and to the point?

Don't make us read a novel. Don't make anyone read a novel for just a jutsu...

TL:DR - Condense it.

Because you failed to specify a particular technique, I shortened the first two only. I removed what flavor text I thought was unnecessary and deleted a few explanations.

[adero]

Souzou Saisei (Creation Rebirth)
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary / Juuinjutsu (Seals & Barriers)
Range: Self.
Special: Each appendage (arms and legs) is healed by a single 'S' ranked amount of chakra, while the torso and the head require 3 charges; must have at least 10 'S' ranked charges in order to use.
Description: After the medic-nin releases the seal upon their forehead, the stored chakra disperses and stimulates the proteins of the medic's body in order to increase the speed of cell division and reconstruction. In short, this allows the medic to recreate all organs and tissues on a near-instantaneous level. The technique itself does not regenerate the old cells, but rather it hastens the creation of new ones through division, after suffering some sort of critical attack. Unfortunately a body's cells can only split a certain number of times in a lifetime. By speeding up this process, a medic choose to shorten their life span severely. While the user may not die in battle, they will eventually guaranteeing it by speeding up its natural lifespan.
Domain: Infuin-Kai.

Here's an example of a pretty complex seal. I believe it was Tsunade's. Only 178 words on my word document too. Try and keep each jutsu under 250 words. Fair enough?

[la]

I shortened abilities 3 abilities further.

[.DEVIOUS]

Waters of Life: I dislike the ability of a Hozuki, especially without being within the Medical domain, being able to heal wounds. The ability itself doesn't even really make much sense. How does pumping your jelly into a person's body make them get better?

Waking Trance: I don't understand how a Genjutsu is actually causing your body to take less damage. I could understand you tricking your mind into thinking you'd taken less damage, i.e. less pain, so that you could continue fighting while partially ignoring damage taken, but in this manner you effectively protect yourself from almost every level of assault. I also don't understand how this technique is at all a Genjutsu. You turn your brain into jelly and... All in all, the whole technique itself doesn't make any sense.

You should also make sure that you put 'Hozuki' in the Domain of all the Hozuki techniques.

[la]

Apr 21, 2011 20:57:08 GMT -8 .DEVIOUS said:

Waters of Life: I dislike the ability of a Hozuki, especially without being within the Medical domain, being able to heal wounds. The ability itself doesn't even really make much sense. How does pumping your jelly into a person's body make them get better?[ I'll change the domain to medical. As for why it works, their body adapts to the individual's body and then converts itself to the missing material, similar to growing a transplant from your own DNA to prevent rejection.This simply grows that transplant on at a hyper-accelerated rate.]

Waking Trance: I don't understand how a Genjutsu is actually causing your body to take less damage. I could understand you tricking your mind into thinking you'd taken less damage, i.e. less pain, so that you could continue fighting while partially ignoring damage taken, but in this manner you effectively protect yourself from almost every level of assault. [The Genjutsu does NOT make you take less damage. All it does is trigger the same reaction that is triggered whenever the Hozuki is knocked unconscious (turning their body to jelly). The reason why you take less damage is because the jelly would be very similar to the water form in that you take no significant physical damage.] I also don't understand how this technique is at all a Genjutsu. You turn your brain into jelly and... All in all, the whole technique itself doesn't make any sense.
[The ability is Genjutsu rather than Ninjutsu because it tricks your mind, it performs some level of illusion on your senses and makes a portion of your brain believe you are actually unconscious while actually being conscious.]
You should also make sure that you put 'Hozuki' in the Domain of all the Hozuki techniques. As for the Domains, the Genjutsu doesn't have the tag because anyone could learn the technique, it just wouldn't turn a normal person into jelly since their bodies aren't the same as a Hōzuki.]

I added medical only to the first two techniques under 'domain'.

[.DEVIOUS]

With the addition of the Medical domain to those techniques I'm alright with them.

I've done a bit more looking into/thinking about Waking Trance and I believe I understand the effect you're trying to create now. I only have a few more question regarding Waking Trance; if you've tricked your mind into thinking that you're unconscious, you may as well be unconscious. How does an unconscious person manipulate items and the like? Also, is the only point of having higher levels of the technique to prevent the opponent from being able to break it with their Kai? I'd feel more comfortable if the threshold for breaking the Genjutsu with Kai wasn't quite so high, too - perhaps one level of Kai higher than your level of the Genjutsu, so that it's still possible to break the A Rank version? Finally, you should probably state somewhere in the special or description that pain doesn't break this Genjutsu like it normally would.

[la]

Apr 22, 2011 7:22:55 GMT -8 .DEVIOUS said:

With the addition of the Medical domain to those techniques I'm alright with them.

I've done a bit more looking into/thinking about Waking Trance and I believe I understand the effect you're trying to create now. I only have a few more question regarding Waking Trance; if you've tricked your mind into thinking that you're unconscious, you may as well be unconscious. How does an unconscious person manipulate items and the like? The simple answer is that this genjutsu is focused only a specific part of the mind. Never every portion of your mind believes you're unconscious, only the specific part that causes the jellified effect. It would be easier to explain if there were more information on this effect and why it happens, but essentially it's like a genjutsu making you blind by effecting your eyes, but rather than simply making them blind by making them see darkness, it fools the rest the eyes and the rest of your senses into believing your eyes are fine and thus preventing your other senses from becoming slightly sharper to compensate for the loss of sight. It's kind of complicated if you try to go into it, but essentially this technique effects ONE particular part without effecting anything else. If anything, the thing that doesn't necessarily make sense is the inability to use other techniques (save passive ones) during this ability. I added that more for a balance thing, so people wouldn't seek out this ability as an offensive technique. This can be reflected in my character's (the one who will probably use the ability first) doesn't have a need for offensive techniques, so this genjutsu might be considered 'incomplete', but she'd find it good enough to use without trying to tweak it to allow offensive use of chakra.] Also, is the only point of having higher levels of the technique to prevent the opponent from being able to break it with their Kai? I'd feel more comfortable if the threshold for breaking the Genjutsu with Kai wasn't quite so high, too - perhaps one level of Kai higher than your level of the Genjutsu, so that it's still possible to break the A Rank version?[Actually it's stated in that you are immune to equal level or lower Genjutsu, BUT you only need to be affected by equal level or higher Kai for the ability to break. Just like like you requested and actually a bit weaker since A can be cancelled by A. This is mostly so friends can cancel the ability, since it'd be rather difficult for an opponent to realize you're under the effects of a Genjutsu and then come use Kai on you (another reason I thought restricting offense was important ).] Finally, you should probably state somewhere in the special or description that pain doesn't break this Genjutsu like it normally would.

Added Waking Trance's pain immunity to it's special, indicating that it cannot be broken by pain.

[.DEVIOUS]

I was pretty sure it said earlier that you had to have 2 ranks of Kai higher, but I suppose that I misread someplace. /shrug

You've answered all of my questions about the technique but to be honest I'm still not sure about it. I think I'd like to ask Fina to take a look at it and to have him tell me what he thinks. The site's still pretty new and there aren't a lot of abilities yet to be able to decide on whether or not things should be allowed and their given powers. I also find it difficult to think that you'd be able to trick only a part of your mind into thinking you were unconscious just to trigger the jelly state, but that's my personal opinion on the matter and shouldn't be taken as canon.

I'll say that I'm alright with all of your other techniques now, I'm going to send Fina a PM and ask him to look over Waking Trance and make a call on that. Thanks for putting up with all my questions, and I hope we can get this stuff accepted soon. ^^

[la]

Yeah I double checked. I know it never said you needed two-ranks higher of Kai to be released but when you brought it up I thought that maybe I forgot to add the equal ranks of Kai could defeat the ability.

Part of my reasoning for this is 'ninja-magic' of course (it is the naruto universe), but also because Genjutsu partially works on belief and as technique that you want to happen, you mind/body is more accepting of the effects. It's kind of like driving yourself into berserker rage or clearing your mind to tune your senses, but rather than requiring deep meditation or drugs, you 'cheat' by using chakra to seal or trick a portion of your brain. This could be due to paralyzation of a certain part of your brain or some other effect (but then it would probably be closer to ninjutsu than genjutsu, and probably be a part of the medical domain). Either way, we'll see what comes of Fina's decision. Thanks for your speedy replies and consideration, it is appreciated greatly.

[☆ F ☆]

Forced Removal - The thing about multi-tank jutsu is its better to shy away from retraining them because it can get messy as to which on you retrain. rather, make it unlimited since its a BL ability, remove the medical requirement (hozuki can do this without being medics), and add that 'D' ranked substances take a turn to remove, and each rank above adds a turn and you're good to go.

Walking Trance - No.

Flavor Seal - Make it multi-rank so that you may only seal genjutsu equal to your highest rank known.

[la]

Apr 22, 2011 18:13:59 GMT -8 ☆ F ☆ said:

Forced Removal - The thing about multi-tank jutsu is its better to shy away from retraining them because it can get messy as to which on you retrain. rather, make it unlimited since its a BL ability, remove the medical requirement (hozuki can do this without being medics), and add that 'D' ranked substances take a turn to remove, and each rank above adds a turn and you're good to go. [I'm confused on what multi-tank means. I think you're saying to remove the D,C,B,A,S requirement on use limit? Either way I wanted to address something else. I would prefer to keep it's high level speed (one turn only) so that it can be used to counter extremely deadly poisons,diseases,etc...however I'd be willing to compromise for having the negative effects halted while this ability is working so that even if an S rank poison is flowing through the victim, it won't do anything as long as a Hozuki is working to remove it. This limits the combat utility of the ability since the 5 turns it takes to nullify an S effect could leave both ninja open for even more attacks. Personally, I liked my way better (of course, that's why I made it that way), but I can understand the desire to keep powerful ailments from being removed as quickly as they can be applied. Also, I was thinking that I would like to keep it as a medical nin only technique..while any hozuki might have the tools to do the technique, only a medic nin would have the knowledge and know how to make it work properly. This way it works better as a hard counter for poisons, diseases, etc too, since non-medics won't have it in their repertoire.]

Walking Trance - No. [Removed]

Flavor Seal - Make it multi-rank so that you may only seal genjutsu equal to your highest rank known. Added the multiple ranks