Water shiz

[Sharkk]

Water Release: Rolling Tide[/u]
Rank: C
Type: Offensive, Defensive
Range: 5 meters
Chakra/Stamina: Mid
Special: Requires no hand seals, starts off at being able to move forward five meters, plus five every time retrained, maxing out at 20 meters. To use the jutsu one must be on water, unless they have a portable water source or have a KG like the Hozuki.
Description: A basic Suiton jutsu, the user merely kicks their foot forward, using a small amount of chakra to create a meter high and two meter wide collected wave to roll forward, capable of knocking individuals over, which would cause them to be plunge into the water, giving the user a quick advantage. Though if used out of water, it would merely send the target rolling, also allowing the user a quick advantage to capitalize on.
Domain: Suiton.



Water Release: Rising Water Tower[/u]
Rank: C, B.
Type: Offensive, Defensive
Range: See special!
Chakra/Stamina: Mid-High / Mid-High upkeep
Special: C-Rank version allows for water to rise up to the user's full height and blocks all C-Rank attacks and below, while the B-Rank rises up to three times the user's height and blocks all B-Ranks and below. C-Rank = 5 meters, B-Rank = 10 meters. Can block one attack/technique of equal rank, with an additional block each retraining.
Description: The user forms a string of hand seals, causing a ring of water to rise up around the user, defending them from out side attacks. The B-Rank version has been known to set up enemies for finishing attacks as well, being able to lift them up off the ground and suspend them for a few moments.
Domain: Suiton.

[永遠に]

Water Release: Rolling Tide
Rank: C
Type: Offensive, Defensive
Range: 5 meters
Chakra/Stamina: Low
Special: Requires no hand seals, starts off at five meters, plus five every time retrained, maxing out at 20 meters. Using the jutsu while not on water raises it's chakra cost to Mid.
Description: A basic Suiton jutsu, the user merely kicks their foot forward, using a small amount of chakra to create a meter high collected wave to roll forward, capable of knocking individuals over, which would cause them to be plunge into the water, giving the user a quick advantage. Though if used out of water, it would merely send the target rolling, also allowing the user a quick advantage to capitalize on.
Domain: Suiton.

So how would this work without water?

Water Release: Rising Water Tower
Rank: C, B.
Type: Offensive, Defensive
Range: 5-10 meters
Chakra/Stamina: Mid
Special: C-Rank version allows for water to rise up to the user's full height and blocks all C-Rank attacks and below, while the B-Rank rises up to three times the user's height and blocks all B-Ranks and below.
Description: Another Suiton jutsu that requires no hand seals, the user merely stomps their foot on the ground, tapping the foot works just as well, causing a ring of water to rise up around the user, defending them from out side attacks. The B-Rank version has been known to set up enemies for finishing attacks as well, being able to lift them up off the ground and suspend them for a few moments.
Domain: Suiton

You should make this require hand seals because usually all defensive and guard-type jutsu require them. Otherwise this'd be avatar and not naruto.

[Sharkk]

Like how some shinobi use Water jutsu without water sources? O.o

And k.

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[Sharkk]

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[Axcel]

The second technique is missing a domain, lol. Other than that, I see no notable faults.

[Estilo]

Jun 23, 2011 6:35:59 GMT -8 Sharkk said:

Water Release: Rolling Tide

[/u]
Rank: C
Type: Offensive, Defensive
Range: 5 meters
Chakra/Stamina: Low
Special: Requires no hand seals, starts off at five meters, plus five every time retrained, maxing out at 20 meters. Using the jutsu while not on water raises it's chakra cost to Mid.
Description: A basic Suiton jutsu, the user merely kicks their foot forward, using a small amount of chakra to create a meter high collected wave to roll forward, capable of knocking individuals over, which would cause them to be plunge into the water, giving the user a quick advantage. Though if used out of water, it would merely send the target rolling, also allowing the user a quick advantage to capitalize on.
Domain: Suiton.[/quote]
The wave crests at a meter high, but what about its width? Specify that- taking into account the fact that it is performed with a 'small amount of chakra'.

I was going to ask you to do the same with the technique when it is performed off of water, but I'm a bit on the fence about that. Creating water out of thin air in that manner seems like something Hozuki's should be able to do. Not ordinary ninja. Especially considering the fact it is a wave capable of knocking back foes with its power. You can change that or wait for another mod's opinion.

Jun 23, 2011 6:35:59 GMT -8 Sharkk said:

Water Release: Rising Water Tower

[/u]
Rank: C, B.
Type: Offensive, Defensive
Range: 5-10 meters
Chakra/Stamina: Mid
Special: C-Rank version allows for water to rise up to the user's full height and blocks all C-Rank attacks and below, while the B-Rank rises up to three times the user's height and blocks all B-Ranks and below.
Description: Requiring a C-Rank amount of hand seals, the user forms said hand seals causing a ring of water to rise up around the user, defending them from out side attacks. The B-Rank version has been known to set up enemies for finishing attacks as well, being able to lift them up off the ground and suspend them for a few moments.
Domain: Suiton
[/quote]
Change it to "After performing the required hand seals," or something along those lines. "Requiring a C-Rank amount of hand seals," might confuse people, and suggest the same goes for the B-Rank version of this technique.

When you say 5 - 10 meters I'm assuming that's the radius in which it surrounds you, right? I only ask because you mentioned it is "able to lift [enemies] up off the ground and suspend them for a few moments" for the B-rank (at a 10 meter distance, I assume). Oh, and make that clear as well- if it applies: C-Rank has a radius of five meters, B-Rank has a radius of ten meters. Put it in the special, then put "See Special" in range if you want. To avoid further confusion.

All in all, these seem like some good techniques! I plan on learning them both once they're approved.

[Sharkk]

doneee.

[Sharkk]

bump

[chiatsuki]

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[.DEVIOUS]

Water Release: Rolling Tide
Rank: C
Type: Offensive, Defensive
Range: 5 meters
Chakra/Stamina: Low
Special: Requires no hand seals, starts off at being able to move forward five meters, plus five every time retrained, maxing out at 20 meters. Using the jutsu while not on water raises it's chakra cost to Mid.
Description: A basic Suiton jutsu, the user merely kicks their foot forward, using a small amount of chakra to create a meter high and two meter wide collected wave to roll forward, capable of knocking individuals over, which would cause them to be plunge into the water, giving the user a quick advantage. Though if used out of water, it would merely send the target rolling, also allowing the user a quick advantage to capitalize on.
Domain: Suiton.

I'm going to go ahead and say that you need water for this. I'm okay with this sort of attack with the kick, it's pretty original and would be a nice surprise technique, but I'm not okay with you being able to do it while not standing on water.

Water Release: Rising Water Tower
Rank: C, B.
Type: Offensive, Defensive
Range: See special!
Chakra/Stamina: Mid
Special: C-Rank version allows for water to rise up to the user's full height and blocks all C-Rank attacks and below, while the B-Rank rises up to three times the user's height and blocks all B-Ranks and below. C-Rank = 5 meters, B-Rank = 10 meters.
Description: Requiring a C-Rank amount of hand seals, the user forms said hand seals causing a ring of water to rise up around the user, defending them from out side attacks. The B-Rank version has been known to set up enemies for finishing attacks as well, being able to lift them up off the ground and suspend them for a few moments.
Domain: Suiton.

Pretty sure someone already told you to modify it to just say "after performing a set of handseals". You don't get to cheap out of doing more handseals when using a B rank technique simply because the technique is multi-ranked, unfortunately. The B rank version of the technique should also require High chakra, as we're about to start enforcing the E=Very low, D = low, C = medium, B = high, A = very high, S = massive rule except on very specific occasions, and this isn't one. =)

[Sharkk]

done.

[Kii!]

Jun 23, 2011 6:35:59 GMT -8 Sharkk said:

Water Release: Rising Water Tower

[/u]
Rank: C, B.
Type: Offensive, Defensive
Range: See special!
Chakra/Stamina: Mid-High
Special: C-Rank version allows for water to rise up to the user's full height and blocks all C-Rank attacks and below, while the B-Rank rises up to three times the user's height and blocks all B-Ranks and below. C-Rank = 5 meters, B-Rank = 10 meters.
Description: Requiring a C-Rank or B-Rank [depending on rank of technique] amount of hand seals, the user forms said hand seals causing a ring of water to rise up around the user, defending them from out side attacks. The B-Rank version has been known to set up enemies for finishing attacks as well, being able to lift them up off the ground and suspend them for a few moments.
Domain: Suiton.[/quote]

This should have either a chakra cost per turn, or an effective time limit. Also, it should only block one of each rank (depending on the rank known) without retraining. Retraining could add more.

[Sharkk]

doneee

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