Ototon-Inkaten Shinkirou no Jutsu (Flashing Point

[Izanagi]

Ototon-Inkaten Shinkirou no Jutsu (Flashing Point Mirage)[/u]
Rank: C
Type: Genjutsu / Illusion of Sight
Range: 10 meters ( See Special )
Chakra: Low per mirage
Special: This jutsu only works when a sound is being made. The mirage itself can only move no more than 10 meters from where the sound was originally made. The sound acts as a trigger for the genjutsu; therefore, if the opponent does not hear the sound, the mirage is not seen. While the mirage is a visual illusion the trigger is activated by hearing. The mirage can only be an image of yourself or of someone else. For example, you cannot just create a mirage of a giant bijuu to make the opponent flee. The number of mirages created is 1 when first learned, and then 1 more every time retrained, up to 10 mirages. The mirage lasts 3 turns, or until it is touched and proven to be an illusion.
Description: The user focuses their chakra on a noise or vibration and manipulates the sound waves to create a quick lasting mirage. The mirage usually consists of the users own image, but with enough skill the user can create any image they want.
Domain: Ototon, Sight Illusion

[chiatsuki]

I say make this C ranked. It's a very simple and basic technique and requires hardly any concentration on the users part. It can be 1 mirage the first time learned up to a total of 5. 20 Seems a bit much.

[Izanagi]

Ok i made it a C- Rank.. is it ok now?

[chiatsuki]

fix your coding and ill look over it.

[Izanagi]

Sept 11, 2011 15:31:30 GMT -8 chiatsuki said:

fix your coding and ill look over it.

fixed it

[Estilo]

In my opinion, I think the chakra cost should be a solid 'Mid'. Also, I think what sohyo meant was an extra image for each time retrained.

• One mirage can be formed when first learned, plus one each time retrained- for a total of five mirages.

Try putting something like that in your special. I also feel that you should include a restriction to the size of the mirage this technique can create- so you don't form five bijuu mirage's and expect a PC to run off in fright. I feel any mirage's the size of a human adult or lower are acceptable. Include something like that in the special as well. Furthermore, next to the 'Genjutsu' in type, put ' / Illusion of Sound' I.E:

Type: Genjutsu / Illusion of Sound

And the same goes for the Domain:

In all honesty, I don't see how sound could enter somebody's ears and later form a mirage. Maybe it'll disrupt their senses, to the point where they think they're seeing double of someone- but to form clear and diverse images? I dunno. My suggestions above have been provided out of courtesy, in case the other mod's feel the technique is valid.

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[Izanagi]

Must it have "Mid" i mean, its a short genjutsu that only lasts for a second if even a full second.. and if i change it to where it can be stacked..( which i have no problem with) wouldn't it be better to lower the chakra amount used? i'm not a mod so i cant say..I'm fine with changing it to how you say, but wouldn't that bother other users who might use the jutsu? perhaps if i lengthen the illusion time to a little long and make it mid range it can be universally excepted..

And it uses sound as a means of triggering the genjutsu, so if i focused on the ringing of my bells for example i could create a short mirage and fool the opponent, and the mirage has to be the same size as a human.. otherwise it wouldn't be fair to other players.. i'll specify that.. thanks for mentioning it..

[chiatsuki]

Yes but it'd go up to mid after you learned it the first time. More chakra, more mirages.

[Izanagi]

ok so for the first learn it'll be low=1 mirage, for anything after that it'll be mid level. Fair?

[chiatsuki]

Put chakra from low - very high because after a while that many c ranked mirages will build up. I didn't mean put it in the description.

[Izanagi]

done..

[.DEVIOUS]

I've modified the coding to be what it should be. If you could, please make sure that all future customs are coded in this way, because otherwise I have to go back in and fix everything when they get put into the Data Books =p.

I've also slightly modified the technique for it to give chakra cost per mirage instead of the simplistic "Low-Very High" because it really wasn't detailed in the jutsu how to accumulate additional chakra expenditure. I also created a limit on the number of mirages you'd be able to create. I also modified the technique to give a duration on the mirage or a way for the mirage to be defeated. Finally, I changed the domain a little bit so that it was worded better.

Everything else remains the same. As it is now, the technique is acceptable, and I give my 1/2.

[Izanagi]

Thanx!.. i like it better like this! xD

[chiatsuki]

good work me, lash, n espado.

2/2