Eshaku Raikou (Lightning Bow)

[sakaki]

Eshaku Raikou (Lightning Bow)
Rank: D, C, B, A, S
Type: Offensive | Ninjutsu
Range: 10 meters per rank. (10 at D, 50 at S)
Chakra: Uses chakra equal to the rank used.
Special: Creates a stun effect for any limb that 'arrows' hit, lasting for half a turn. If the target's head is hit, their entire body is rendered stunned for half a turn turn. By taking an extra turn to 'charge' the bow, the user can double the range of the technique, at the cost of doing damage one rank lower. 'Arrows' travel at kunai speed normally, and 'kunai and a half' speed upon charging for extra range.
Description: After performing the needed handseals, the user will wave both arms through the air, leaving raiton chakra behind in the shape of bow and arrow. The lightning arrow can then be shot at an opponent and stun them from afar. By taking extra time to focus their energy, the arrow can be re-shaped for distance, rather than power.
Domain: Raiton

Sniping technique. Tear it apart, guys.

[Comatose]

Distinguishing the specials by use of a second "special 2" category isn't needed. Just combine it into one.

Distinguish how fast the shot moves, or people will bitch. The "Kunai Standard" should be fine imo.

[Axcel]

On paralysis:

In order for acceptance, one of these three things has to be within the technique:

1) The user has to be effected by the paralyze technique as well.
2) Requires a turn of charging for turn of paralyze.
3) The paralyze is less than a half turn.

If you don't have one of these three things controlling the strength of the paralyzing technique, it can't be accepted.

Remove special 2 and just make it a second sentence in special, plox. Also, beneath range should be "Chakra" where you specify the amount of chakra it costs.

[sakaki]

Modi-mi-fied.

Did kunai speed, and 1.5 kunai speed when doing the ranged charge.

Stun/para effect reduced to half a turn.

Chakra is based on the rank used. If using the D-rank bow, then it's D rank, etc. (Did I really need to specify?... Seems kinda... redundant?)

[Axcel]

Chakra cost isn't necessarily reflected by rank. For example, a S-rank jutsu can cost 'Very High' or 'Massive'. So, if you leave it as is, it will be assumed to be: Low, Mid, High, Very High, and Massive (D-S). If you're okay with that, then you have my approval. 1/2

[sakaki]

Yup yup! 'Tis A-okay!

[Icarus]

2.2

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Well done user, congratulations on having your jutsu chosen for NRP's Data Book!

Stay tuned for updates shorly...

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Eshaku Raikou (Lightning Bow)

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Rank: C
Type: Offensive / Raiton Ninjutsu
Range: See special!
Chakra: Mid
Special: Range of arrows is determined by the user's higest 'Karai Shin' range. Arrows travel at twice the speed of a kunai. Up to one arrow can be made and shot each time, plus one more each time retrained.
Description: After performing the needed handseals, the user will wave both arms through the air, leaving raiton chakra behind in the shape of bow and arrow. The lightning arrow can then be shot at an opponent and stun them from afar. By taking extra time to focus their energy, the arrow can be re-shaped for distance, rather than power.
Domain: Raiton. Karai Shin.

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