Medic/Souin Techs - WIP

[Charlatan <3]

Fukatte Pokkiri Tarazu no Kawaii Men [Hard Life Having Just Short of a Pretty Face][/u]
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary/Medical NinJutsu
Range: Self (See special!)
Special: When first learned this technique will last for a period of 1 turns, plus 1 more turn each time retrained (this technique can trained a total of 10 times[/u]). This technique adds one 'A' rank worth of damage to any taijutsu used in conjunction with this technique during its duration (damage is not stacked[/u]). For every turn this technique is keep active, the user risks a 10% chance (every turn, 10% will be stacked, until one essentially reaches 100%, in which the limb would be considered unusable for the rest of the thread) of the muscles within the limb being severely injured to the point where the limb may be unusable. This damage may only be treated by a medic with knowledge of Shosen 'A' rank or higher. While this jutsu is in affect, the medic will be UNABLE to mold NinJutsu of any kind or form.[/u]
Description: After gaining a mastery over the art of healing chakra and its various properties, one may then continue to learn about the specifics of the body. With this technique, the user is able to multiply the muscle within a certain area (typically an arm or leg) by up to three times the normal amount. The medic does so by concentrating the chakra all around their body and temporarily transferring it into the designated area. For a certain amount of time, stemmed from the medic's knowledge of this technique, a medic may keep this technique active. When using this technique, the affected limb will be up to 3 times larger in muscle mass than normal, while the rest of the body will be up to 3 times as malnourished. Once the muscle is transfered, the medic can choose to either continue using the technique with the risk rising every turn, or the medic can cancel it by using Shosen on the affected limb.
Dominion: Medic, Mastery, Shosen 'A''
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Kajin no Ikusen Omo [Beauty of a Thousand Faces][/u]
Rank: S
Type: Offensive/Specialized NinJutsu
Range: Self (See special!)
Special: Damage of strike (and what can be destroyed by the force of the technique) depends on highest rank of 'Chakura no Iko' known. When first learned, this technique will send a target (be it a tree, rock, person, etc.) flying backwards 50 metres. Each time this technique is trained after the initial (with a max of 5 times trained total[/b]), the distance increases by 50 metres (with a total distance of 250 metres[/u] being achievable). For every 50 metres the target travels, B-rank tumbling/blunt damage will be dealt (this is due to the sheer force of the technique, causing the target to temporarily descend to the earth to tumble and ascend back into the air.) The target will never fly more than 5 metres off the ground (losing 1 metre every 50 metres traveled). Due to the destructive nature of this technique, it may only be used 3 times per thread.[/u] If one exceeds the usage limit, the bones within the hand used for the technique will shatter, and the muscles in the limb will be severely injured to the point where it will cause intense pain, preventing any form of movement in the limb (forming of handseals, molding chakra, & NO use of Souin techniques in the next RP Thread[/u] the user is in). To heal the damage, the user must be treated by a medic (or themselves, though this would be slightly more difficult) with a knowledge of 'S' rank Shousen. Regardless of how many appendages the medic may have, this technique can only be used with one fist.[/u]
Description: After having gained a mastery over the arts, one's strength greatly increases. As such, the control a medic may now show is incredible, thus making this technique much more dangerous than normal. From intense training in the art of Souin, a medic is now able to channel their strength into one designated area. In this case, the fist is supercharged with the special chakra. When the user finds the target they wish to attack, they launch their chakra-charged fist forward towards the center of a target. As the fist connects with the target, the medic will deftly control when the massive amount of chakra is released. After the initial punch, the medic will then release the massive amount of chakra in a straight line. This release of chakra is truly what creates the deadly force of the jutsu. Due to the sheer force at which the chakra is released, as well as how much of it, will cause the target to be send flying backwards at a height of 5 metres. For every 50 metres the target travels, it will be pulled down by gravity to tumble on the ground for about 5 metres (dealing B-rank tumbling/blunt damage), only to be sent back into the air (due to the rough tumbling force). Every time the target ascends back into the air, a meter in height is lost, until the target finally touches back down to the ground.
Dominion: Medic Profession, Medic Mastery, Chakura no Ito 'S'[/size]

[.DEVIOUS]

Kajin no Ikusen Omo: I'd feel a lot more comfortable with this technique if you toned down the maximum range of it ... by about 750 meters.

[Charlatan <3]

I made it so if someone really wanted to reach the full range, they would have to train a great deal. Seeing a A/S ranks are not exactly cheap (or bump it to S rank), it would cost them at least 3000 (for A rank) or 6000 (for S rank) to train all the way. And I made it so not only can they use it once per thread, but there is a cool down of not being able to use the limb in the next RP thread (meaning no form of handseals, TaiJutsu, molding chakra with the limb used, etc), as well as not being able to use ANY form of Souin techniques in the next thread.

With all the drawbacks (one use per thread, the cool down of not being able to use the limb, or any souin techniques for the next thread), plus the cost, I think it could be rather controlled. Changing it to S rank (which I think would better suit the way the technique works in all) would mean even then it would be a jutsu that could not be used without any drawbacks to the user.

[marvolous.]

Apr 29, 2011 17:21:14 GMT -8 .DEVIOUS said:

Kajin no Ikusen Omo: I'd feel a lot more comfortable with this technique if you toned down the maximum range of it ... by about 750 meters.

Even so, I shudder to think at how OPed a person could be if they learned this technique to the max - even with all its drawbacks. 1000 meters is about 60%-ish of a mile, reduce it like Devious said.

[Charlatan <3]

After speaking with Devious about the 'beam' tech, I have removed it due to its lack of closeness to Souin. Also, small things in the punch tech have been edited, and a new medic tech as well. I tried.

[DAVID BOWE]

First technique, lower the length from five rounds to around three, or two. I'd suggest lowering it to one and making it re-trainable for more rounds even. Also I’d say eliminate that the user can use this technique on someone else. Depending on the limb I’d suggest adding into the drawback that they can’t use Ninjutsu either. (I mean think about it, one arm growing three times larger in muscle mass while the other isn’t. Molding chakra or even doing handseals would be tough.) Other then that I’ll let Lash look at it. In all honesty I really am not a fan of this technique.

I’d suggest lowering the maximum amount of uses towards three. Other than that it has my 1 . 2.

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[.DEVIOUS]

I don't really like the technique either; however, with that being said, there's no reason for it not to be accepted. It just means that we don't have to learn it. Reading over the technique I'm alright with it - there's both significant risk and significant reward for its use.

I noticed you made several of the changes that Shibu suggested, so I'm going to throw a 2.2 on this.