Lightning Customs

[Kariya]

Kaminari Houden - Hou (Lightning Discharge - Cannon) [/u]
Rank: C
Type: Offensive/Ninjutsu
Range: Self
Chakra/Stamina:Mid
Special: Numbs the parts of the body that is hit, effectively disabling it from being used until numbness wears off. Numbness lasts for 1 turn. Each time the technique is retrained, the numbness extends by 1 more turn. After numbness wears off, there is a 2-turn cooldown rate before the effect can be used again, and during the 2-turn cooldown, even if the jutsu is used there is only damage and nothing else. Numbness forces any actions to require more stamina and jutsu to require more chakra. When numbed, it will require an additional 20% more chakra/stamina to use a jutsu since it will weaken the opponent's focus.
Description: After forming the handseals, the user stores a large amount of electricity into their attacking limb and unleashes a powerful charge of electricity into the opponent upon contact. The amount of electricity discharged is capable of numbing the opponent which would hamper their fighting capabilities depending on the area hit. If used with extreme precision, it is even possible to paralyze the victim for a short period. Yellow lightning arcs through the entire arm as the technique is executed, with a minor explosion of light when contact is made.
Domain: Raiton.

Kaminari Houden - Soukyou (Lightning Discharge ¨C Twin Lance)[/u]
Rank: B
Type: Offensive/Ninjutsu
Range: Self
Chakra/Stamina:Mid
Special: Aside from numbness, the technique deals consistent internal damage to the opponent for the subsequent two turns after the initial hit. The internal damage is 1/5 of the original damage. Each time it is retrained, it increases by one turn. Effect will only occur once on an opponent. Internal damage appears in the form of coughing up blood, erratic breathing, lightheadness and cold sweat.
Description: Similar in principle to the Lightning Discharge technique, the user is now more capable of controlling the electric currents in both arms. By driving both palms into the target, the damage is greatly amplified. As opposed to the Lightning Discharge focusing on accuracy to properly execute, the Twin Spear variation usually aims for a larger area such as the abdomen. This serves to blast the opponent¡¯s internal organs with large amounts of the buildup electrical currents, damaging them internally as well as externally as the electric courses through their internal organs.
Domain: Raiton. Kaminari Houden - Hou.

Kaminari Houden - Sengoku (Lightning Discharge ¨C Purgatory)[/u]
Rank: A
Type: Offensive/Ninjutsu
Range: Self
Chakra/Stamina:High
Special: The technique messes up the flow of the chakra within the target, rendering them unable to cast any ninjutsu or genjutsu for 1 turn. Each time retrained adds 1 more turn to the effect. There is a 3-turn cooldown for the effect. During the cooldown period, if the technique is used again, there is only pure damage but no effect.
Description: Focusing only one arm this time, the user proceeds to grab the opponent with one hand while the attacking hand, with a large amount of electric built up, slams into the opponent three times in the same spot. By assaulting the same spot three times in a row, it not only causes internal damage but also messes up the target¡¯s chakra system by overloading it with destructive Raiton chakra. Yellow lightning travels up and down around the user¡¯s striking arm as electricity builds up.
Domain: Raiton. Kaminari Houden - Hou.

[Axcel]

On Paralysis:

In order for acceptance, one of these three things has to be within the technique:

1) The user has to be effected by the paralyze technique as well.
2) Requires a turn of charging for turn of paralyze.
3) The paralyze is less than a half turn.

If you don't have one of these three things controlling the strength of the paralyzing technique, it can't be accepted.

Aside from that, these attacks should require hand seals (I'm assuming they don't, from the way they were described). Regarding the second technique, can you elaborate more on the internal damage? Specifically regarding how much it's doing, as it should be much lower than the initial hit (internal B-rank damage for several rounds would be too much for this technique). It should serve more as a hindrance than something lethal.

The third technique seems balanced, since it requires three hits. The bit with black lightning should be changed because, even though it seems to be purely aesthetic, it is related to Darui's Black Lightning which will be released eventually (No ETA on that since it is low priority and there is very little information), so we're not accepting black lightning techs. You can have blue if you want though!

[Kariya]

I changed the paralysis to half a turn, added that they need handseals, added the damage for the internal damage, and also changed the lightning to yellow =)

[◤ velocissimo ⊿]

On the first technique. What's the difference of that technique to Sutangan no Jutsu? Which is already in the Raiton index.

Sutangan no Jutsu (Limb Stunning Technique)
Rank: C
Type: Offensive / Raiton Ninjutsu
Range: Touch
Special: If used on a person’s head, they will be knocked out for a single post. Limbs are usually numbed for 1/2 of a turn. Stunning effect cannot be stacked.
Description: The electric influence that exists over the human body and its muscles allows one to control the later through unconventional methods, including through the means of chakra. After charging a small electric shock in the user’s hands, one can approach their victim and place the charged hand onto a limb or muscle on their body, unleashing the pent up shock and rendering the aforementioned target useless for the rest of the turn. Although simple, it’s highly effective when the user is faster than the victim, and can outmaneuver them as they strike. Also highly effective for keeping captives in place!
Domain: Raiton.

[Kariya]

About that, the first technique's effect is stronger than the Limb Stunning technique. And it's able to be retrained.

[Estilo]

'KAY.

• So, if the first technique is going to fly, then you should change the chakra cost to 'Mid', as is typical for C-Rank techniques. I also think there should be a cap on the limit of turns the numbness can be in effect. Or at least a period of time that it takes to charge. What are the differences between numbness and paralysis IC'ly anyway? Don't they both restrict use of said limb to a certain extent? That should be explained more in depth.
  
• The second technique, does it carry the same effect of numbness that the first one does? If so, put it in the special, too. Also, go into the details of internal damage a bit more. Effects and such. Does it make breathing erratic, stomachs churn, etc.
  
• Third technique- add numbness effects in special if they apply like they do in the first technique. I definitely feel the limit of turns active should be limited too. And if the numbness effects are active, this basically incapacitates the opponent, no? Ninjutsu and Genjutsu restricted, their Taijutsu basically useless. I hope you understand how overpowered this might seem to others. Therefore, I think the numbness effect should be held back for this one- as it focuses on internal damage.

I have more, clearer, suggestions for you- and I'll voice them soon! Gogogo~

[Kariya]

So, if the first technique is going to fly, then you should change the chakra cost to 'Mid', as is typical for C-Rank techniques. I also think there should be a cap on the limit of turns the numbness can be in effect. Or at least a period of time that it takes to charge. What are the differences between numbness and paralysis IC'ly anyway? Don't they both restrict use of said limb to a certain extent? That should be explained more in depth.

I changed the chakra cost. Also, I have added a cooldown period for the effect. I have removed paralysis, but I have specified what numbness does.

The second technique, does it carry the same effect of numbness that the first one does? If so, put it in the special, too. Also, go into the details of internal damage a bit more. Effects and such. Does it make breathing erratic, stomachs churn, etc.

I have removed the numbness, as the internal damage effect + numbness might make it overpowered. However, can I increase the damage of the subsequent damages fro 1/5 to 1/4?

Third technique- add numbness effects in special if they apply like they do in the first technique. I definitely feel the limit of turns active should be limited too. And if the numbness effects are active, this basically incapacitates the opponent, no? Ninjutsu and Genjutsu restricted, their Taijutsu basically useless. I hope you understand how overpowered this might seem to others. Therefore, I think the numbness effect should be held back for this one- as it focuses on internal damage.

Removed the numbness too for this technique. Can I not limit the turns active, but put a 3-turn cooldown period instead?

[Estilo]

Alright, here's my new input:

• The first one looks fine to me so far; I wanna hear what other mods have to say about it.
  
• Second one looks nice, too!
  
• Third one- thumbs up!
  
• In my opinion, these techniques have been fleshed out nicely, to differentiate themselves from the basic, run of the mill "paralyze" techs. Until other mods get a say in, I give you my:

1/2!!

[Axcel]

2/2