Kaguya [Pt.1]

[vegapunk]

Kyoki Yanagi no Mai [Dance of the Weeping Willow]

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Rank: C
Type: Offensive / Special Bloodline Technique / Nintaijutsu
Range: See Special!
Chakra/Stamina: Mid
Special: The bones grows approximately 10 feet outward from the user, plus an addition 2 feet everytime this technique is re-trained.
Description: Kyoki Yanagi no Mai is named after the Weeping Willow, a tree that has long limp branches, thus it got the name of 'weeping'. Utilizing the ability of the Shikotsumyaku, the user channels their chakra and is able to grow bones from their forearms, palms or fingers. These bones have little calcium in them, but the strength lies in the amount that is created and that they are shaped and armed with extremely sharp barbs. The bones are utilized as coiled whips by the Kaguya clansmen, taking enemies out from a distance, immobilizing them with an array of thin whips from the forearm, palms and fingers which interconnect when around the target. The barbs make the immobilization more effective as they dig into the targets body. Once released, if it's still connected to the Kaguya, they are able to control the whips movements, as it is flexible like elastic. But, if the user wishes, they are able to disconnect the 'threads' from their body in an instant.
Domain: Kaguya. Must know 'C' ranked Calcium Compression.

Hikage no Mai (Dance of the Club Moss)[/u]
Rank: C
Type: Offensive / Special Bloodline Technique / Nintaijutsu
Range: See Special!
Chakra/Stamina: Mid
Special: The bones grows approximately 5 inches outward from the users arm, plus another 5 inches everytime this technique is re-trained. Highest rank of 'Calcium Compression' determines the level of penetration into the flesh and muscle of the target.
Description: Hikage no Mai is named after the Club Moss, which has a unique style of lateral growth. Using the ability of the Shikotsumyaku the user will channel chakra into their bones to grow several jagged leaf-like entities from the top of their arm down to their wrist that creep out from the arm, forming several small branch structures similar to how antlers grow. However, while this technique appears at base level to be a simple bone technique capable of coating the user's arm in jagged like antler shapes, the true strength behind these outstretched bones are the scale-like leaves that are only visible when viewed up close. The scale-like formation of bones make it so that these bones not only have the ability to pierce the target, but also grind away at their flesh and muscles, vastly making this technique more effective, especially when used with the speed and grace of the Kaguya clansmen. The user needs not to pierce his opponent, but rather simply brush against the target in order to cut away at them.
Domain: Kaguya. Must know 'C' ranked Calcium Compression.[/blockquote]

[Axcel]

Both of these techniques are standard C-rank Kaguya jutsu—there's no reason their consumption cost should be lower than mid. The domain of the first technique should also be 'C' ranked.

[vegapunk]

Mmkay edited. I just thought that chakra/domain could be different to account for varying difficulties, otherwise it would all just be grouped under 'rank' if each is set by rank?

[vegapunk]

bump

[addy-hime ♥]

The fact that these techniques are re-trainable accounts in large part for the difference in chakra consumption from the basic 'C rank is Mid' scenario, as each retrain will cost a bit more for the user. That aside, reading these techniques, as Axcel said there's no reason they should be below Mid to begin with. That's the consumption amount that makes sense.

I see nothing glaringly wrong with these techniques, so I'm going to give them a 1/2. The description of Hikage no Mai could be a bit clearer, but it gets the point across.

Just as a side note, try not to 'bump' your threads. It's a bit easier to PM a staff member the link here, and faster if you happen to catch more than one. :3

[vegapunk]

Thank you for the clarification. Trust me, I thoroughly do not like to 'bump' things but I really wanted these approved..I will PM in the future (I wasn't sure which was preferred as both can be annoying). ^^

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