Savage Strike Arts: Snake Expansion

[Gentlemanne]

Tsurutsuru Hebi (Slippery Serpent)
Rank: C
Type: Supplementary / Specialized Taijutsu / Savage Strike Arts
Range: N/A
Stamina: N/A (Mid upkeep per turn for flexibility)
Special: Once they assume their stance, the user can opt to add an additional amount of flexibility to their body, allowing them to shift their weight far easier, contort themselves to the point that they appear dislocated from their joints and ultimately weave around attacks in a more efficient fashion. (Note: This does not automatically dodge techniques and is reliant on clever RP'ing to get proper use out of it.)
Description: Taking on the principles of a snake, the user will funnel more effort into their muscles and ligaments to loosen themselves up, allowing them to take on an even more liquid posture. By shifting their weight quickly, weaving, turning and slipping around, the user is able to contort themselves in and around areas they usually couldn't, such as dodging multiple things at a time and forcing themselves into narrow spaces. Movement during is neither impeded or increased, instead, it allows them to take the current speed they've got and use it to its fullest potential. As an additional strength for the technique, the user is able to balance themselves in ways they usually couldn't, such as balancing all their weight on one leg, or shifting their weight whilst close to the ground.
Domain: Savage Strike Arts.


Setsunai Kobura (Suffocating Cobra)
Rank: B
Type: Offensive / Specialized Taijutsu / Savage Strike Arts
Range: Arms reach.
Stamina: High + Mid upkeep.
Special: During Tsurutsuru Hebi, the user will wrap one or two limbs around an opponent and immediately squeeze, utilizing their equally strong, but far more flexible muscles in a form of constriction. The opponent takes B-Ranked damage initially, as well as damage equal to their rank in ''Savage Soul" assuming a critical hit is struck. Additional damage may be applied by constricting again, though it takes an additional ''High" amount of stamina to do so. Force equal to one less than the users ''Savage Soul" rank is required to remove the binding.
Description: Further delving into the nature of a snake, the user will wrap one, two, three or even four limbs around the opponent, and begin constricting their loose muscles. By clenching around the opponent, the user can dislocate and even break bones, or suffocate the opponent assuming they are holding onto something related to air flow. Whilst constricting the opponent, their limb will go numb and be useless, but will retain its use assuming the user hasn't damaged it too much.

One Turn(s): Slight numbness, the users strength and speed with the bound limb is halved.
Two Turns: Complete numbness, the limb is unable to move until one turn after the user is removed. If wrapped around an area involving breathing/air flow, the opponent will begin to get light headed and sluggish.
Three Turns: Assuming the limb is not already broken/dislocated, it will be promptly ripped out of socket and fractured. If wrapped around an area involving breathing/air flow, the opponent will lose vision and all Taijutsu and speed will be cut in half for two turns after the user is removed.
Four Turns: The limb will begin getting crushed and finally break, assuming it hasn't already. Already broken arms will be crushed further, mashing the muscles with the broken bones. If wrapped around an area involving breathing/air flow, the opponent will pass out and begin the final stages of suffocation.
Five Turns: The limb will be completely torn apart internally, due to the bones and muscles being ground together. Use of the limb will be null until medical treatment is sought out. If wrapped around an area involving breathing/air flow, the opponent will suffocate, causing them to die.
Domain: Savage Strike Arts. Requires ''Tsurutsuru Hebi".

Rikiddo Hebi (Liquid Snake)
Rank: D, C, B, A, S
Type: Defensive / Specialized Taijutsu / Savage Strike Arts
Range: See special!
Stamina: Low - Massive
Special: By using their loosened muscles and additional stamina, the user is able to loosen their muscles more and move with the impact of an attack, allowing them to shave off damage equal to one less than their rank in the move. Piercing damage and burning/shocking damage is not affected by this move. In order to make use of the technique, the user MUST move in tandem with the attack, in order to completely take advantage of their looseness.
Description: By completely embracing their embrace of snake like movement, the user is able to loosen up and take the brunt of an impact in their stride, due to moving in tandem with the attack. Although piercing and elemental damage isn't affected, the user is able to shave off the majority of an impact. Whether they are being punched, thrown against something, dropped or hammered, the user is able to soften up and take it in their stride, though higher ranked jutsu aren't going to be completely mitigated by the technique.
Domain: Savage Strike Arts. Requires ''Tsurutsuru Hebi".

Nyoronyoro Ippo (Slither Step)
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary/Specialized Taijutsu/Savage Strike Arts
Range: See special!
Stamina: N/A
Special: Allows the user to execute extremely low to the ground or awkward positioned shunpo through use of their flexible, yet equally strong muscles. (Note: Users directional control of shunpo is still reliant on their knowledge, as such, a user with simply the base tech cannot go backwards, in an arc, etc)
Description: By watching and memorizing the movement of a snake, the user is able to train themselves to shunpo in a more unique fashion, usually involving them slipping forwards close to the ground, or shunpoing from an awkward position. With clever use and mastery of shunpo techniques, this allows a Slippery Serpent practitioner the ability to confuse their enemies, due to moving from completely foreign positions.
Domain: Savage Strike Arts. Requires ''Tsurutsuru Hebi" and ''Shunpo".

[adero]

The enhancements are: The ability to smell warm blooded creatures, being able to see far clearer (to the point where the user could read a book at their maximum range) be able to taste spilled blood on the air and also hear footsteps within their range.

Not comfortable with this, esp if you take it in a loose sense and add on implications for a somewhat creative rper.

[Gentlemanne]

That's vague, what part specifically do you not like about the enhancements? I can lessen them, but I'm not completely removing enhancements from it.

Or more so, which enhancement are you not comfortable with? I can elaborate on them more if you'd like.

[Gentlemanne]

Edited in accordance with adero's requests.

[.DEVIOUS]

Kari Raion (Hunting Lion): I'm honestly not comfortable with this technique at all. It's almost reminiscent of the "sensor" jutsu on NFRP that ruined the entire site's battling system. I understand that this one has a consumption cost and isn't passive, but at the same point -- how does standing in a relaxed position, increased bloodflow or not, give you the ability to 'read a book' from 25 meters away, smell warm-blooded animals, taste blood in the air, and hear footsteps?

Techs like this just don't have a place on this site. :/

Tsurutsuru: I'm a little wary of this, too, because of the obvious correlation between it and a lot of Kage Hebi jutsu, but as of right now I'm not going to get into an argument about it.

Rikiddo Hebi (Liquid Snake): I'm not a big fan of this technique, mostly because there's absolutely no drawback to it other than consumption. You don't need any prep time because its a Taijutsu, with the S rank of the technique you can completely nullify certain techniques A Rank and below, and in the end you don't have to do anything other than say "Okay, I want to use this right here" and then only spend a Very High amount of Stamina...? Another question, too, would be if you're being slammed up (or even thrown) against something, how would you 'move' with the attack in order to lessen damage? If you were being thrown on a flat surface and you could roll or something, I could see that, but otherwise...

Basically, I don't like this one being here either, but things we could do to improve it would be to require you to actually be able to move with an attack (so being slammed against something won't allow you to escape unscathed), and either: 1) increase your Consumption to be Low-Massive (D being Low, C being Mid, B being High, A being Very High and S being Massive); 2) find some way to require preparation for the ability; 3) Change it so that it will only knock the damage down one rank and keep current consumption; 4) Make it so that you can't ever completely nullify a strike, but this one kind of fits with #3 so I dunno.

The first thing is pretty non-negotiable with me, but you can pick what you'd like from the list and make some kind of edits. I'll be at a wedding for the rest of the day so I probably won't be back until later, but I'll take a gander at your response then.

[Gentlemanne]

As for the first question, due to the style being about constantly giving into primal urges and forcing themselves to act more like animals, I thought animal-esque enhancements would be fine, considering you have to not only go into the stance, constantly upkeep chakra and focus on your surroundings, but also be in an extremely specific situation to get even remotely close to your complaint that it's like sensor techniques.

I'm fine with cutting the sight bonus, since that was just added for flavor anyway. And even the hearing bonus, since it is pretty much irrelevant in a branch of techs based around snake-like abilities, but being able to smell bodily heat (something that isn't going to help you at all if there is more than one other living being in the thread) and smell blood (something that you have to get into a very specific situation to utilize) are two things that I don't think are too far out of the question.

As for the flexibility technique, it's infringing on Kage Hebi only in the way that you're more flexible. I can't stretch, spit poison, shoot snakes out of my body or do anything even remotely close to what Kage Hebi can do, besides ''be loose". I know you didn't want to argue that, but I'm just offering my side of the argument to give you my reasoning for it.

Also, if you read the last tech (since I'm sure it was just my crappy wording that alluded you) it says that: take the brunt of an impact in their stride, due to moving in tandem with the attack I can further emphasize that, if you'd like, I realize my wording is a bit vague. You'll HAVE to move with the attack, not just stand there, derp around and then get the bonus. I'm cool with changing the cost from Low to Massive, too.

But for the enhancements, I think two tiny enhancements for flavor and very little advantage is fine for a style based entirely around immortalizing animals and a constant upkeep, especially when we have customs letting you move 200% faster just because you feel like it. Edits have been made.

[KEITH]

I am a noob at customs, but I am just going to say what I think...

The enhancements are: The ability to smell warm blooded creatures on the air, which strictly allows the user to know somebody is within the range, friend or not and not their direction and/or be able to taste shed blood on the air, allowing them to pinpoint the direction of the source.

You are a human, you don't have any animal-like alterations performed on you. This is simply a Taijutsu (hand to hand technique), so how does it allow you to do the above things that I quoted? Just because you take on a snakes characteristics..doesn't mean you get their abilities. Especially one like this that humans (being a ninja or whatever has nothing to do with it) do not normally have.

[Gentlemanne]

Welp, if flavor isn't allowed in the techniques, I guess I'm just going to change them and add another.

[Gentlemanne]

Edited the base technique to have the second techniques effects as an optional buff (with added stamina). Added a new technique, as well.

[KEITH]

Neat-o.

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[Messatsu!]

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[~Kohana <3]

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