Buzz Buzz

[Dingo]

Tokaichuu no Jutsu (Elemental Bug Technique)
Rank:S
Range:Close (0m ~5m), Mid (5m ~10m), Far (10m+)
Type:Supplementary
Handseals:--
Chakra Consumption: Low per turn

---

[/u][/b][/font]
It is said that these insects are flame given life. They are smaller than any other Tokaichuu variant currently known, and resemble small floating embers, that dance and hover while they await their masters orders. In combat, they are a purely destructive force, who fly forth and seek out their targets hoping to swarm and encircle them. Upon contact, these insects begin to burn and melt any material around them. Emitting such high levels of heat that a mere 200 of them upon a limb or appendage would be enough to completely cover it in 1st degree burns which only increases in severity as long as they are attached. (2nd degree burns would develop around 2 turns, and 3rd degree at 3 turns)

Note: When used in tandem with Kikaichuu techniques, the Hihaimushi will seek to burn and melt away flesh, as opposed to eating away the opponents chakra. The intensity of their generated flame and heat, can be increased with the correctly associated Katon masteries ( At best, melting steel, and lowering the amount of turns before 2nd and 3rd degree burns by 1.) [/ul]

[/u][/b][/font]
Being the largest versions of Tokaichuu, these insects are heavier (though not to the point of hindering their user), and stronger than their other counterparts. Umerukouchuu are insects evolved to burrow beneath the ground and survive there for extended periods of time. While under ground, these insects can sense seismic activity, as well as locate anything within the surrounding area that is in contact with the earth, and relay the location of it to their owners (Capable of sensing up to 10 meters in every direction per 200 insects used, for a maximum of 30 meters in every direction). These insects also possess a vicious appetite that, a long with their long pincer like facial muscles and reinforced chitin, allows them to eat away the supportive structures of platforms and structures (both man-made and natural), that consists of earth, wood, and even metal.

Note: These insects are capable of burrowing in earth, steel, and wood (as well as material of a similar nature), and retain their sensory ability while doing so.
[/ul]

[/u][/b][/font]
These small, horsefly sized insects, are perhaps the most versatile of all Tokaichuu. Breed for pure support, the Shinkuu no Mushi have very little offensive capability at all. Though this is not to say they do not have a place on the battle field. Feasting on the Wind natured chakra of their owner for so long, has given these insects a natural affinity for flight, and air control. All Shinkuu no Mushi can coat themselves in razor sharp chakra and buzz about their target, ripping, and slashing at high speeds.

Note: When used in tandem with kikiachuu techniques the insects will hunt down their prey and take on the cutting power of wind, slashing and berating their target with multiple cuts. [/ul]

[/u][/b][/font]
The oddest of all Tokaichuu, Suitoba no Mushi are unique, but odd, long legged insects with long thin wings. Their bodies are thin enough to allow them to dive through water and swim at high speeds, or simply stand atop it, floating naturally as they coat their thin legs with chakra purely through instinct. These insects seek out any form of moisture, and drain it from the selected source, until completely dry

Note:When used in tandem with Kikiachuu based techniques, Suitoba no Mushi will seek out their target, and attempt to drain the moisture from their bodies with their long, thin, needle like mouths. This severely dehydrates an enemy, weakening them, and leaving behind a shriveled appendage, or corpse, depending on where, and how long they were attached. (It would take no less than 3 turns to completely drain an appendage or body, leaving it lifeless.) [/ul]

[/u][/b][/font]
These ominous bugs are never seen very clearly outside of their swarms. Instead they rise from their owner, like a cumulus cloud, a swarm of insects dancing about so silently, you can scarcely hear anything from them was it not for the occasional buzz and flash of lightning. Raikonchuu are a special breed of Tokaichuu, who have taken on the powerful storm bringing abilities of the Lightning nature chakra. Within their black,grey bodies, is a small bulb like conductor, formed naturally through their exposure to lightning chakra, that allows them to displace, and discharge electricity. This also allows them to act as a conductor/lightning rod, drawing in all lightning based techniques and absorbing or dissipating them.

Note: When used in tandem with Kikaichuu based techniques, Raikonchuu will seek out their target, and once contact is made, send out a small shock of electricity into the nervous system, numbing and paralyzing whatever limb or body part, they should happen to fall upon (taking a single turn to numb a limb or body part, and up to 3 turns before full paralysis. It should be noted that while attached to a target, the lightning rod ability of the Raikonchuu is still active. Meaning, the lightning projectile will be drawn to the target and seek them out so long as they are within range, or the Raikonchuu are still attached.[/ul]

---

[/b] These breeds of Tokaichuu all require the 2nd tier Aburame Hiden Mastery to manifest and use. It should go without saying that all Tokaichuu, are naturally immune to their given element. Only one breed of insect may be selected upon learning. This technique replaces, Kikaichuu no jutsu in all jutsu requirements, and the mastery count, once learned. This change is permanent, and the user is barred from using Kikaichuu completely. AT LEAST 200 INSECTS NEEDS TO BE PRESENT UPON A LIMB, OR BODY PART, IN ORDER FOR ANY OF THE AFOREMENTIONED EFFECTS OR ABILITIES TO TAKE PLACE, WHERE APPLICABLE. By default the user starts off with 2000 Tokaichuu at the beginning of every battle. [/ul]



Mushi Bazu no Jutsu (Bug Buzz Technique)
Rank: C
Range: Close (0m ~5m), Mid (5m ~10m), Far (10m+)
Type:Offensive
Handseals:4
Chakra Consumption: Mid per bolt

[/b]The user must hold the final seal formed in order to fire multiple bolts of lightning, during which time, they cannot move, but can still command other Raikonchuu not being utilized by this technique. Only one bolt of lighting can be fired per post. 300 insects are used in this technique. The user must know Tokaichuu no Jutsu, and have selected Raikonchuu as a breed of insect, in order to utilize this technique [/ul]



Raikou Hazumi no Jutsu (Electric Rebound Technique)
Rank:C
Range:Close (0m ~5m), Mid (5m ~10m), Far (10m+)
Type:Supplementary
Handseals:--
Chakra Consumption:Low per rebound

[/b]This technique only works on Raiton ninjutsu of B rank and lower, this also extends to Electric charged items as well. Anything above this rank will simply strike the bugs, leaving them unaffected. At least 300 bugs are needed for this technique.The user must know Tokaichuu no Jutsu, and have selected Raikonchuu as a breed of insect, in order to utilize this technique [/ul]



Mushi Raitama no Jutsu (Lightning Bug Bullet Technique)
Rank:B
Range:Close (0m ~5m), Mid (5m ~10m), Far (10m+)
Type:Offensive
Handseals:3
Chakra Consumption: Mid per bullet formed.

[/b] 50 insects are needed for this technique, and are destroyed immediately after penetrating a single target. Insects can only travel 15 meters after being "fired" from their given position, before losing their potency, and simply falling to the ground dead. Only a maximum of 3 bullets can be formed per cast, and the bullets must be formed with 5 meters of the user. Insects The user must know Tokaichuu no Jutsu, and have selected Raikonchuu as a breed of insect, in order to utilize this technique. [/ul]


Mushi Chimanako no Jutsu (Insect Frenzy Technique)
Rank:S
Range:Close (0m ~5m), Mid (5m ~10m), Far (10m+)
Type:Offensive
Handseals:8
Chakra Consumption:Massive

[/b]At least 1000 bugs are needed for this technique.After casting, the user can hold the final seal of the technique, and sacrifice a High's worth of chakra per turn (for a maximum of 3 turns) To delay the launch of a number of insects, preventing all of them from being fired at once. The insects cannot over penetrate, and can only travel 15 meters from their original position before losing their potency. The user must know Tokaichuu no Jutsu, and have selected Raikonchuu as a breed of insect, in order to utilize this technique[/ul][/ul]

---

[Hecatus]

Should probably limit the mutation of bugs into any alternative form to only once per thread. I can't imagine them being able to handle the genetic stress of having their nature innately changed so frequently without outright dying.  That said, I still personally think any form of bug mutation should be S ranked per the existing one in the index and should take a significant amount of time to do so.

If anything, we could follow suit with the prior one you made, where the cost is still relatively high due to the bugs not fully converting from their chakra hungering nature.

[Dingo]

I limited the amount of mutations per thread because that makes sense. Multiple mutations on any species would be traumatic, and I doubt it could be done multiple times.

As far as all mutations being S ranked, I can see how you think that way seeing as the only listed mutation is S rank and requires like 7 days OOC to manifest. Though I dont think that should be the case for every Kikaichuu variant. Their are many whose uses are pretty simple, and while these insects are an off shoot of their original forms, their ability is really just a play off the second aburame mastery, which states the insects have evolved to a point that they have become immune to a given element ( in this case Raiton).

I dont feel like an S rank really suits them, because their not quite extreme enough in my opinion. Maybe if they shocked people to DEATH but i don't think a minor change like electric discharge, numbness and eventual paralysis warrants them to be any higher than an A rank. Especially since the other mutation technique can kill an opponent with much more ease.

I figured double the amount of chakra Kikaichuu no jutsu takes was enough.. but if you think it warrants more, I can see that as well.

Hecatus

[Comatose]

Should be S-Rank. The ranks of techniques really aren't supposed to entirely dictate their damage, but rather limit the damage threshold. An S-Rank damage doesn't innately do more damage, but rather has the capability to do more damage. This falls under that category, but in relation to effect. The bugs are by your own admission, a mutation of the normal kikachu, which fundamentally is a strong concept. Since our main inhibitor is actual ninja rank I simply don't see a ninja having the 'skill' to be able to pull this off before Jounin. This is not my only critique.

I feel as though every elemental transformation of bugs should be handled by one tech. We get into tree-bloat with 100 of these quite easily and because in the canon we are told there are literally mutations for everything it's not far fetched to believe we could very well come across that many if people wanted to make it. It's simple to re-purpose this to fit every normal element (barring ototon). If it's not re purposed this way I honestly can't imagine accepting it.

The subsequent techniques are largely fine and would only need to be changed to work with that specific mutation of bug.

[Anmida]

Basically agree with everything said but want to add that there should be some indicator of how long it takes for the bugs effect to take place. Also probably double the amount of bugs needed to carry out the desired effect (burn, paralysis, etc) cause 100 per person means you could paralyze 20 people at once. In lieu of the increased bugs needed and the time needed for the effect to take place, you could add a function where for every x amount of bugs, the time needed for the desired effect to take place is reduced.

[Dingo]

Anmida

Thats my bad for not explaining thoroughly.. you need 200 for a single appendage. full body would be around 1000.. i am currently restructuring the technique. so i will consider what you said as well

[Anmida]

1. Raikonchuu still need a duration for where numbness takes effect and then proceeds to paralysis.

2. Shinkuu no Mushi should require 300 per rank.

3. As was argued about in the C-box, I do not believe Aburame's should be allowed access to Kikaichuu and Tokaichuu. I can understand having access to Kikaichuu and the Iryouchuu or even the Giant parasite bugs cause they aren't as powerful or an evolutionary leap. Tokaichuu is on the level of Rinkaichu (I'll be making a minor edit to them soon) and thus must be limited. Also dedication I don't think will work. Having one element of bug is already a big advantage.

[Jae]

Umerukouchuu (Digger Beetles)
Being the largest versions of Tokaichuu, these insects are heavier, but stronger than their other counterparts. Umerukouchuu are insects evolved to burrow beneath the ground and survive there for extended periods of time. While under ground, these insects can sense seismic activity, as well as locate anything within the surrounding area that is in contact with the earth, and relay the location of it to their owners. They also have the ability to generate seismic disruptions in and out of the earth, that can weaken whatever substance they are attached to, be it buildings, or the very ground below. The Umerukouchuu will rapidly vibrate,and dispense their given chakra to bring ruin to whatever their owner targets.

Note: When used in tandem with Kikaichuu based techniques, the Umerukouchuu will fly out, or skitter across the ground, in hopes to surround and bind the opponent, before rapidly vibrating and sending constant waves of energy into them, causing bones to weaken and break over time as though they were being crushed by boulders. (It would take at least 3 posts for the targets bones to break, but a single post to weaken them.)

The seismic sensing needs to be better explained. 200 bugs are the requirement for the effect but, with that being the minimum, how far can they sense? Giving an exact range for that 200 will provide the figure for how much sensing potential you have at the beginning of battle (because you can possess upwards to 2000). Keep in mind these are insects (i.e. very tiny).

Lastly, I'm not entirely sold on vibration (and likewise bone weakening) being attributed to the something Earth related. I understand that seismic activity directly involves land/earth but, in a literal sense, that is entirely due to plate tectonics. The vibration is resultant, not catalytic.

My recommendation is to make these bugs function more like termites in that they eat inorganic matter (earth specifically, maybe wood and steel as well) as opposed to chakra.

[Dingo]

Anmida, Jae, @comatose
Got rid of the dedication thing

got rid of the seismic thing.. made it so they only eat inorganic things.. and some organic things like wood and so on.. basically materials. I also verified how their sensing thing worked.

You cant use Kikaichuu and Tokaichuu.. once u learn Tokaichuu no jutsu.. you lose the ability to use Kikaichuu, and must use Tokaichuu in all jutsu afterwards, using their given effects..

The debate was whether a Tokaichuu could be mutated into a Iryouchuu. Which I figured they could be. It was assumed that Iryouchuu HAD to be mutated from kikaichuu currently in your system, this is not the case.. they are an evolved breed of Kikaichuu, the same as Rinkaichuu or Tokaichuu, except there is a technique that can mutate Kikaichuu into Iryouchuu if the situation demands it, but they remain Iryouchuu permanently. Since Tokaichuu can be used with anything related to Kikaichuu there was a bit of confusion on the subject.

It then came down to if the Iryouchuu could live in the same space as Tokaichuu. Which they can't.

TLDR; Tokaichuu and Iryouchuu can't be in one host. Iryouchuu are a breed of kikaichuu, but are a species of their own ( think of the difference between a sled dog and a bloodhound. Same species, bred for different situations.) You cannot have two breeds of Tokaichuu, you cannot have Tokaichuu AND Kikaichuu

[Hecatus]

Pretty sure Yuri meant you shouldn't be able to house elemental and medic bugs at the same time but it's ok to house normal and medic at the same time.

[Dingo]

there was a missing "'t" at the end of one of those.. i'm fully aware of what was being said

[Naitome]

1. I love this whole concept. Really dope to see out of the box Aburame bugs.


2. Digger beetles - What rank of armor/equipment are we talking? Are they heavy enough to significantly effect your weight or hinder your movements while 'inside' you? These bugs can comfortably inhabit even destructive earth techniques you create by being 'underground' when the tech is formed? If so, especially given their name, define their digging ability/speed, and let us know if that applies to other earth-base things (they can eat metal but can they burrow inside of/hide in it? In wood? In sand? This weakening people through waves of chakra like crushing boulders nonsense is extraneous, get rid of it or make it so that the absolute most they can do is weaken/disorient people; the focus should be on digging, the seismic sense fits as a method for receiving stimuli while digging, the rapid material consumption fits as a method for digging, the magic earth chakra vibration spray of pain doesnt.


3. Water skipper bugs - So they're just an endless source of water? I can use some C - B Ranks, and because it's natural water from the bugs, I've generated enough water to use an S Rank that needs a lake? They convert chakra into water, but independently developed an ability to drain actual water from people? Wouldn't they not need to do that, or, wouldn't they just turn chakra into water while draining it from their victims?


4. Electric rebound technique - If it can reflect B Rank and below, make it a B Rank tech. If its a C Rank, make it reflect C Rank and below. Is this ONLY straight Raiton, or also other lightning big techniques? This is essentially a less strong version of what the wind bugs do right? Does a lightning coated projectile also get reflected?


5. Lightning bug bullet technique - Is there a limit to the amount of bullets that can be formed at one time, and are you performing new Handseals for each bullet, or do you do the Handseals once and then can make more bullets willy nilly? How far from their user can these bullets be formed; I.e. If you have some bugs 15 meters away and behind your opponent, you can have use the tech and snipe them or the bugs have to travel back to you to get 'charged' with Raiton?


6. Insect frenzy technique - For reference: how fast do these insects get shot out? The wording of the note is convoluted; are you saying that for a high you can make any 200 bugs shoot out in every direction and bore holes through folks, without paying the massive cost? Can you do other stuff/jutsu while delaying this technique? I'd think holding the seal while suspending the frenzy is probably necessary, but you'd be able to move normally otherwise. If not, and you're just forcibly making your chakra work this way, you should be standing still at least while delaying it. You hype up the Handseal count in the description, but it's onł four more seals than one of your C Ranks. There's no specific number I'd tell you to increase it to, but make it reasonably high to legitimize the phrasing, if you're gonna use it.

[Jae]

Umerukouchuu (Digger Beetles)
"(eating anything A-rank and below in a matter of moments)"

How many turns? The amount should increase per rank, or the amount of insects should increase per rank.

[Dingo]

I changed and simplified alot. All the complex powers are gone, and may be substituted for techniques later. Thank you to everyone for your suggestions, i do still appreciate them.

The only ones i didnt touch where the ones people didnt have a problem with. With this.. I dont think their should be any more problems.

Digger beetles no longer eat materials.. just select materials from surrounding ish like buildings and dirt and steel. So there is no need to worry about what rank they can eat anymore.


Fixed what Naitome said.

Took away vacuum techs from the bugs, thats something that can be put into a seperate jutsu (made by somebody else).

I also lowered Chakra cost. Simply because i was using the old system of chakra management, and based off the system I just looked up. 2x Mid are 60 points each.. and a massive is only 100. A person would be dry in less than 3 turns.... ( given the average 2x Massives)

Naitome Anmida Jae

[Jae]

These look a lot better! The simplified versions keep them balanced and make them more appealing. Great work, homie. The only thing left to do (aside from optional grammatical fixes) is to quantify certain aspects involving their abilities.

Hihaimushi (Burning Ash Insects)
It is said that these insects are flame given life. They are smaller than any other Tokaichuu variant currently known, and resemble small floating embers, that dance and hover while they await their masters orders. In combat, they are a purely destructive force, who fly forth and seek out their targets hoping to swarm and encircle them. Upon contact, these insects begin to burn and melt any material around them. Emitting such high levels of heat that a mere 200 of them upon a limb or appendage would be enough to completely cover it in 1st degree burns which only increases in severity as long as they are attached. (2nd degree burns would develop around 2 turns, and 3rd degree at 3 turns)

Note: When used in tandem with Kikaichuu techniques, the Hihaimushi will seek to burn and melt away flesh, as opposed to eating away the opponents chakra. The intensity of their generated flame and heat can be increased with the correctly associated Katon masteries ( At best, melting steel, and lowering the amount of turns before 2nd and 3rd degree burns by 1.)

What masteries are necessary? It should be more than Tier 1 considering the effects, although I recommend nixing this entirely (others may disagree so take this with a grain of salt)

Also, you state that 200 are capable of leaving first degree burns on contact. Does that imply that 600 would leave 3rd degree burns in one turn? That's a game changer if so; it gives them one-shot killing potential if used in higher numbers (and with the associated masteries)

Shinkuu no Mushi (Insects of the Vacuum)
These small, horsefly sized insects, are perhaps the most versatile of all Tokaichuu. Breed for pure support, the Shinkuu no Mushi have very little offensive capability at all. Though this is not to say they do not have a place on the battle field. Feasting on the Wind natured chakra of their owner for so long, has given these insects a natural affinity for flight, and air control. All Shinkuu no Mushi can coat themselves in razor sharp chakra and buzz about their target, ripping, and slashing at high speeds.

Note: When used in tandem with kikiachuu techniques the insects will hunt down their prey and take on the cutting power of wind, slashing and berating their target with multiple cuts.

Your wording still loans toward the original concept you had for them. They are, by now, purely bred for their offensive capability (lol).

That aside, this bug isn't described in terms of number-to-effect. That could be intentional, but the amount and kind of damage they do has to be scaled somehow. I recommend using the format you've already used, stating how much they do at 200 and describing what effect takes place as their numbers increase.

Suitoba no Mushi (Water Skipper Insects)

Same as above and with the Fire Bug technique. If 200 are the minimum for any affect, does maximum potential increase when those numbers are increased? Do 600 cause the 3rd turn effect to happen in 1 turn?

Raikonchuu (Lightning Bugs)

Same as above and with the Fire Bug technique. If 200 are the minimum for any affect, does maximum potential increase when those numbers are increased? Do 600 cause the 3rd turn effect to happen in 1 turn?

Overall I think these look way better than they did before. All they need now is some fine tuning. My recommendation for what I'm asking (if you even choose to implement them) would be to list a breakdown of what X number of bugs does over X amount of turns.

Something akin to this:

200 Hihaimushi: 1st degree burns in 1 turn. 2nd degree in 2 turns. 3rd degree in 3 turns.
400 Hihaimushi: 1st degree burns on contact. 2nd degree in 1 turn. 3rd degree in 2 turns.
600 Hihaimushi: 2nd degree burns on contact. 3rd degree in 1 turn.
800+ Hihaimushi: 3rd degree burns contact.

This depends on whether an increase in numbers changes their effect at all, if not don't worry about,